TPO 54 The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake The level of salt in the lake s water what scientists call its salinity has been increasing steadily for years because the lake s water is evaporating faster than it is being repla

The passage and lecture both raise the concerns of increasing salt level in the Salton Sea, which would be a threat to the life of the inhabitant fishs and birds. Whilst, the author believes that this problem can be addressed by three specific solutions, the lecturer opposes the author’s claims. In her opinion, these solutions do not hold water.

First, the author claims that salt level will drop by desalination. To be specific, it is stated in the article that through special facilities, the water in the lake will evaporate into the steam and returned to the lake as water without any salt. In contrast, the lecturer argues that by evaporating the lake water, not only the salt that dissolved in the water will be left behind, but also other toxic chemicals as well. Additionally, he maintains that these toxic chemicals are capable to spread through the air, which further endangers people’s life in the neighborhood.

Second, the author mentions that diluting the lakes with water from the Pacific Ocean will help to reduce the level of salinity. On top of that, he adds that because the water from the ocean is not as salty as the water from the lake, delivering the ocean water into the lake through pipelines or canals would reduce the salt level in the lakes. However, the lecturer brings up doubt to this solution because building the pipelines or canals will demand a huge amount of financial support, which is not possible at this stage. Further, he remarks that the local government have limited resources to construct the pipelines or canals when it comes to a project of 100 kilometers distance long.

Finally, the author asserts that creating walls to separate the lakes into several sections could regulate and lower the salinity level. He goes on to say that even though the salinity level will be higher in the small sections, the salt level in the main section will be lessened due to the osmolarity effect causing freshwater influx. As appose to the author, the lecturer holds that this solution is not long-lasting because the lake is located in the place where earthquakes usually happen. He highlights that when the major earthquake strikes, it will destroy these walls and the high and low salt-leveled water will be mixed back to the default.

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Average: 8.8 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...not as salty as the water from the lake, delivering the ocean water into the lake...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, well, in contrast, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1373.03311258 138% => OK
No of words: 387.0 270.72406181 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90697674419 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48823926811 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 145.348785872 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509043927649 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 419.366225166 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8682736868 49.2860985944 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.6 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 21.698381199 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06452816374 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.537224951262 0.272083759551 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182202309238 0.0996497079465 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158722987812 0.0662205650399 240% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.323673520205 0.162205337803 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915154402721 0.0443174109184 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 63.6247240618 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 20 minutes.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...not as salty as the water from the lake, delivering the ocean water into the lake...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, well, in contrast, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 12.0772626932 166% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1373.03311258 138% => OK
No of words: 387.0 270.72406181 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90697674419 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48823926811 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 145.348785872 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509043927649 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 419.366225166 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8682736868 49.2860985944 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.6 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 21.698381199 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06452816374 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.537224951262 0.272083759551 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182202309238 0.0996497079465 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158722987812 0.0662205650399 240% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.323673520205 0.162205337803 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915154402721 0.0443174109184 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 63.6247240618 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 20 minutes.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.