A serious problem has been arising in Salton Sea in California- the salinity. As the water evaporating rate become higher than the replacing rate of the rainfall or rivers, the salinity of the lake increases and will soon to be unable to support fish and bird populations. The article provides three solutions to decrease the salinity while the lecturer disagrees with them. The disadvantages of the ideas were pointed out by the lecturer.
First, the article suggests to set up the desalinatin facilities which function by heating the water to turn into steam and exclude the salt and other materials. Though the desalination system can lower the sliity of the lake, the lecturer concerns that the solid materials be excluded by the system will pose a serious threat to human beings once the wind blow the toxic materials into the air and be absorbed by human. Therefore, it is not an ideal way to construct the desalination system before we come up with the solution to deal with the toxic materials.
Second, in the lecturer's opinion, it is impossible for the givernment to spend a huge money to set up a thousand-meter-long pipeline to transport the water from ocean and dilute the water in the lake.
Third, the reading passage provides the idea to construct some walls to divide the lake into several sections and conrol the salinity of each section. However, the lecturer indicate that some situations may happen to make the walls be destroyed such as the earthquakes, and all the efforts will be vanished if the walls are cracked and the water will be mixed up.
As a result, the lecturer disagrees with the ideas provided in the reading passage, and the salinity problem still need to be solved with better ideas.
- TPO 54. The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is being repla 80
- TPO-48 - Integrated Writing Task In recent years, many frog species around the world have declined in numbers or even gone extinct due to changes in their environment. These population declines and extinctions have serious consequences for the ecosystems 63
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 16, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lecturers'' or 'lecturer's'?
Suggestion: lecturers'; lecturer's
... the toxic materials. Second, in the lecturers opinion, it is impossible for the giver...
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Line 5, column 80, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'huge money'.
Suggestion: huge money
... impossible for the givernment to spend a huge money to set up a thousand-meter-long pipelin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, third, while, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 12.0772626932 25% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 6.0 22.412803532 27% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 295.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8813559322 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70227967217 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538983050847 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.3964713743 49.2860985944 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.909090909 110.228320801 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8181818182 21.698381199 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206771262783 0.272083759551 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074651969188 0.0996497079465 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059073845914 0.0662205650399 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114525379445 0.162205337803 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571926900795 0.0443174109184 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.