TPO42-Integrated writing

Essay topics:

TPO42-Integrated writing

The reading asserts that we can apply three solutions for preventing birds to be injured by flying through the glasses of windows. The lecturer, however, finds these ideas dubious and casts doubt on the rationals mentioned by the reading passage.

First of all, the author of the reading argues that we can use one-way glasses which are transparet in one direction instead of the regulate glasses. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that these glasses act like a mirror; as a conseqence, these glasses reflect the picture of sky or trees. Therefore, birds think that they can pass from these glasses and would be injured.

Furethermore, the writer of the reading holds the view that we can use from colorful designs such as colorful lines or thin stripes painted over the glass. On the contrary, the professor underlines the issue that this strips or design would create a clear hole in the middle for viewing the outside. Hence, birds strive to fly through these holes and would be injured again. Besides, if glass producers make these holes very small, inside of the houses would be too dark.

Finally, the reading passage mentioned that since birds use magnetic field of earth for direction, we can produce an artificial magnetic field for directing the birds away from buildings. In contrast the speaker dismisses this idea due to the fact that birds use magnetic fields just for direction in the long distances. For instance, when birds want to go from a cold country to a warm one, they use the earth magnetic field. Also, he continue that, when birds want to go to a short distance, they only use from their eyes and light of the sun.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... transparet in one direction instead of the regulate glasses. Conversely, the lecturer bring...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 192, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
...cting the birds away from buildings. In contrast the speaker dismisses this idea due to ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 437, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'continues'.
Suggestion: continues
... use the earth magnetic field. Also, he continue that, when birds want to go to a short ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, conversely, finally, first, hence, however, if, so, therefore, for instance, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 285.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81403508772 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36532871548 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547368421053 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.541658426 49.2860985944 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.538461538 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06452816374 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.457471824583 0.272083759551 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167310690879 0.0996497079465 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822488671307 0.0662205650399 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262765227258 0.162205337803 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372797753425 0.0443174109184 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 53.8541721854 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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