tpo46
The material discusses the concept of using the electronic medical record system instead of the paper form. While the reading looks at the topic from one perspective the listening challenges certain points outlined in the reading passage.
Firstly, the reading details the points in regard to this topic, namely the saving the medical record electronically is cost-effective. Another point worth nothing, electronic medical record prevents medical mistakes. One final points, electronic medical records can help gathering large amounts of patients’ records.
Conversely, the listening challenges the points. One specific contradiction is doctors who adopt electronic medical record still have to keep the paper records for legal purposes. They still have to pay for paper. In addition to that, using the electronic records cannot eliminate errors given that doctors still using pens and paper on examining the patients, then the data will be entered to the computers by technicians. Finally, access and using medical record information is restricted by the privacy laws. To put it in another, the doctor who wants to get any medical information should ask for a permission in person from the patient; moreover, patients can block the use of their medical records for any purposes other than their own medical treatment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ecord system instead of the paper form. While the reading looks at the topic from one...
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Line 2, column 273, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to gather' or 'gather'.
Suggestion: to gather; gather
...ts, electronic medical records can help gathering large amounts of patients' records...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, so, still, then, while, in addition, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 22.412803532 31% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 30.3222958057 66% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1125.0 1373.03311258 82% => OK
No of words: 204.0 270.72406181 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51470588235 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79087789473 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 145.348785872 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.6871124691 49.2860985944 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.272727273 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.63636363636 7.06452816374 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.590706639651 0.272083759551 217% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.238212404151 0.0996497079465 239% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133880607055 0.0662205650399 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.397227849902 0.162205337803 245% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115991155319 0.0443174109184 262% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.8541721854 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.2367328918 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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