Some Young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to stay with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Explain with specific reasons and examples
I prefer young adults to live with their families for a longer time. Becoming a young adult does not mean that you do not need your parents support. As an adult you can earn but is that the only thing why we stay with our family? The answer is no. We need their support and blessings all our life. They have been responsible for nurturing us by giving love , care and affection. They gave us education. Now its our time that we take the responsibility and give back the same love , care and affection to them. No matter how old we grow , our parents will always treat us like a kid. Staying independe...
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but are parents are growing old.
but our parents are growing old.
flaws:
The essay is not exactly right on the topic. You need to talk about 'independence' or 'dependence', not 'responsibities'
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
better to have 4-5 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1
para 3: reason 2
para 4: reason 3 (optional)
para 5: conclusion
or:
para 1: introduction
para 2: idea one.
para 3: however, idea two
para 4: in my opinion...
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: ? in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 34 15
No. of Words: 421 350
No. of Characters: 1760 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.53 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.181 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.117 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 92 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.382 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.771 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.176 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.367 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.231 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5