Last year many famous pop and sports stars earned millions of dollars each.Many other entertainment and sports stars personalities also have very high incomes.On the other hand, most people in 'ordinary' professions like nurses,doctors and teachers earn only a small fraction of the incomes of these 'stars'.
What you think about stars receiving very high salaries? Is it fair that people with jobs that directly help people are paid much less?
In today's modern world where sports are an integral part of everybody's life. Every society talking about sports stars live in general and the amount of their income in particular should come as no surprise. If the high payment that is common these days can benefit a nation is one way or another,why should not be paid. The salaries paid for various professions are differ from each other by amount. Athletes are sign of the health of the nation while some players are the ornaments of their institutions and some are the pride of their country. Although, there are some other professionals who ear...
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Every society talking about sports stars live in general and the amount of their income in particular should come as no surprise
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If the high payment that is common these days can benefit a nation is one way or another,
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Sentence: Consequently, the sportsmanship encourage the people to play that they bring reputation in the country.
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They play not only to earn money but they play for the reputation and progress
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sports person earn too much money
sports persons earn too much money
their role is too much more important in the society
their role is much more important in the society
There should not be discrimination among the professionals.
There should not be discriminated among the professionals.
if the colossal amount of money given to only sports stars.
if the colossal amount of money are given to only sports stars.
Sentence: For instance, football players receive much money by simply kicking a ball, cricketers earn a colossal amount of money by easily hiting a ball with the bat.
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Sentence: In my opinion, equally payment to the expectionally well done job can guarantee the harmonious development of the society.
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 34 15
No. of Words: 580 350
No. of Characters: 2801 1500
No. of Different Words: 250 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.907 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.829 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.683 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 188 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.646 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.244 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.377 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5