Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowsaday, the sale increasement of the cosumer good shows that advertisments are powerful. Moreover, the product which have been sold are not the real needs of the society. I think people intended to buy more that what they really need in these years because of the advertisment.
Firstly, the media has brainwashed people and create the mindset that people will be more happy if they buy a product. Consequently, people believe that the advertisment and they intend to buy more and more. As an example, the advertisment of instant coffee on TV shows that you will be more happier with your family if you buy instant coffee. Therefore, people believe this and buy more and the sales go up even though it is not healthy to at all to drink instant coffee daily.
Additionally, the coorepartions know how to use advertisments to make people buy more. They target people to buy more of their product such as digital devices. There are always latest versiono f digital devices such as mobile, laptop and machine. The higher purchase of apple product 6s is an example of the advertisment. As people want to be modern and smart, they always want to purchase the latest modle devices even though they already have one.
Therefore, I believe that the higher purchase of googs showing the power of advertisment and they are selling the products which are not the real needs of the society. As resources are limited, we should be aware of what we are buying instead of being brainwashed by the advertisments.
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the product which have been sold are not the real needs of the society
the products which have been sold are not the real needs of the society
the media has brainwashed people and create the mindset
the media has brainwashed people and created the mindset
you will be more happier
you will be much happier
you will be more happy
Sentence: Therefore, people believe this and buy more and the sales go up even though it is not healthy to at all to drink instant coffee daily.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a preposition
Suggestion: Refer to to and at
Sentence: Nowsaday, the sale increasement of the cosumer good shows that advertisments are powerful.
Error: advertisments Suggestion: advertisements
Error: cosumer Suggestion: consumer
Error: increasement Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: I think people intended to buy more that what they really need in these years because of the advertisment.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: Consequently, people believe that the advertisment and they intend to buy more and more.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: As an example, the advertisment of instant coffee on TV shows that you will be more happier with your family if you buy instant coffee.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: Additionally, the coorepartions know how to use advertisments to make people buy more.
Error: coorepartions Suggestion: cooperations
Error: advertisments Suggestion: advertisements
Sentence: There are always latest versiono f digital devices such as mobile, laptop and machine.
Error: versiono Suggestion: version
Sentence: The higher purchase of apple product 6s is an example of the advertisment.
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: As people want to be modern and smart, they always want to purchase the latest modle devices even though they already have one.
Error: modle Suggestion: mode
Sentence: Therefore, I believe that the higher purchase of googs showing the power of advertisment and they are selling the products which are not the real needs of the society.
Error: googs Suggestion: goods
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: As resources are limited, we should be aware of what we are buying instead of being brainwashed by the advertisments.
Error: advertisments Suggestion: advertisements
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
Double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 258 350
No. of Characters: 1212 1500
No. of Different Words: 125 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.008 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.698 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.584 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 86 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 26 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.421 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.371 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.582 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
...ant coffee on TV shows that you will be more happier with your family if you buy instant cof...
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'therefore', 'i think', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.201413427562 0.247107183377 82% => OK
Verbs: 0.16961130742 0.155533422707 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0989399293286 0.0946595960268 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0706713780919 0.0501214627716 141% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0565371024735 0.0437548338989 129% => OK
Prepositions: 0.116607773852 0.122226691241 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0318021201413 0.0403226058552 79% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.7095241173 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0318021201413 0.0326793684256 97% => OK
Particles: 0.00353356890459 0.00163938923432 216% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.095406360424 0.0861772015684 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0106007067138 0.021408717616 50% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.017667844523 0.011925033212 148% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1509.0 1933.35771543 78% => OK
No of words: 258.0 316.048096192 82% => More words wanted.
Chars per words: 5.8488372093 6.12580529183 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20517956788 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.341085271318 0.374742101984 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.228682170543 0.28420135186 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.131782945736 0.203846283523 65% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.077519379845 0.137316102897 56% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7095241173 2.80594681477 97% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 176.037074148 73% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.56093040696 89% => OK
Word variations: 47.2080818748 60.7387585426 78% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0891783567 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.4285714286 20.7743622355 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.218316162 49.517814964 55% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.785714286 127.492653851 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.7743622355 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.714285714286 0.814263465372 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 41.2967884828 49.1944974215 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.17857142857 1.69124875643 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.497234010064 0.332605444948 149% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.163989038609 0.102741220458 160% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0866393395538 0.0668466124924 130% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.60140848009 0.534860350844 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123900663812 0.148594505496 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.228712339194 0.134430193775 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147463949444 0.0742795772207 199% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.348015238188 0.324371583561 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0421155768197 0.0638462369009 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.388186646734 0.228012699653 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138451942387 0.058150111329 238% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.68436873747 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.41683366733 234% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 5.90881763527 68% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 1.9629258517 357% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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