Many lives might be saved if inoculation against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
Author here has made a conclusion that inoculation against cow flu should not be permited.Author has argued that because of the inoculation against the cow there is a small possibility is there that a person can die.The author have not considered many aspects in his argument and he has drawn the conclusion based on number assumptions which need to be clear before drawing any conclusion.
Firstly, the author has mention a small possiblity that a person may die due to the inoclutation against cow flu.But He has failed to mention what is the probability that the person will die to inoculations. If the probability is very low like one in thousand ,state can take a chance which can hep in saving many people lives.So the author should mentioned the probability before jumping to any conclusion.Saving hundred people life is far more important than saving one people life.
Secondly,the author should give the source from which he find out the a person may die during inoculations because there are chances that the source from which the author found out might not be reliable.There may be no harm to the person during the inoculation. Thus before making any assumptions author should check the reliability and authenticity of the source which is very important. Even author should mention the effect of cow flu which can also help to decide whether state should permit inoculation or not.
Last and the most important thing which author failed to mention is the number of lives which can be saved if inoculation against cow flu.Author should provide a statistics stating that number of people who die due to cow flu in recent year which is most important aspect that should be taken into considered .If the statistics have the number of people dying due to cow flu more that hundreds and thousands they state should permit inoculation against cow flu because saving thousands of lives is far more important then saving ones life.
Thus,Before making any kind of conclusion should take these aspects into considerations. Author should find the probability that a person can die due to inoculation.He should make sure of the that source from which he got the information is reliable so making any kind of assumption.He should even think of live which can be affected due to cow flu.Since a person life is a major issue author should consider all the points and should draw a conclusion which can as much life as he can.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246478873239 0.25644967241 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.194835680751 0.15541462614 125% => OK
Adjectives: 0.056338028169 0.0836205057962 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.056338028169 0.0520304965353 108% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0164319248826 0.0272364105082 60% => OK
Prepositions: 0.1220657277 0.125424944231 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0516431924883 0.0416121511921 124% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.80700989079 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0281690140845 0.026700313972 106% => OK
Particles: 0.00234741784038 0.001811407834 130% => OK
Determiners: 0.110328638498 0.113004496875 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0680751173709 0.0255425247493 267% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.037558685446 0.0127820249294 294% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2654.0 2731.13054187 97% => OK
No of words: 411.0 446.07635468 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.45742092457 6.12365571057 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.360097323601 0.378187486979 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.189781021898 0.287650121315 66% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.133819951338 0.208842608468 64% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.114355231144 0.135150697306 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80700989079 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 207.018472906 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.396593673966 0.469332199767 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 42.1047770855 52.1807786196 81% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 20.039408867 45% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 45.6666666667 23.2022227129 197% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 146.819617218 57.7814097925 254% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 294.888888889 141.986410481 208% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.6666666667 23.2022227129 197% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 0.724660767414 184% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 3.58251231527 698% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 64.6447688564 51.9672348444 124% => OK
Elegance: 1.5701754386 1.8405768891 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404203008913 0.441005458295 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.19346223742 0.135418324435 143% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.104621761784 0.0829849096947 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.754755951985 0.58762219726 128% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.20158244029 0.147661913831 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.213249255123 0.193483328276 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100915439973 0.0970749176394 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.41141582612 0.42659136922 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0156318570707 0.0774707102158 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291214453647 0.312017818177 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512440348031 0.0698173142475 73% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.33743842365 36% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 14.657635468 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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