Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society.
The statement is about the death sentence can decrease the number of wickedness. And as a writer, I, overall, agree with that opinion, and I have a few of my own reasons.
The main is all criminals will feel fear when they know that the punishment for their evil deeds is death, and it will make them think a hundred times to continue their crimes. Basically, all people want a long life, and they do not want to finish their lives without satisfying results for themselves and the other people, like family, friends, and partners, that exist around them. For example, there was a criminal canceled...
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Sentence: For instance, Indonesia has a trouble with its teenager who can be easily provoked anger and kill each other, but it can be decrease after Indonesian government create a new rule about the capital punishment.
Description: The fragment government create a is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace create with verb, past tense
Sentence: In the end, I believe that the execution can decline the number of criminals because it can make the criminals feel scare, but some people do not want to support because they do not want to lost their family.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and lost
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Score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 1779 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.459 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.183 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.929 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.606 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5