Sports star and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for millions of dollars they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
Most of the people have a role model in life. They follow their role model in their entire life. They capture most of the characteristics from their role model. Sports stars and movie stars are the role model of most of the people, because they are so famous in public. Young people have an tendency towards them. They want to become like them in their life. They want to look like them, work like them. They do whatever their role model does, instead of seeing that it is good or right. They blindly follow their role model. So, sports stars and movie stars have to be aware of what they doing publicly, because they are being followed by nation's youth. And nation's youth is most important part of the nation's progress.
Being a citizen of the nation, everyone has a responsibilty to help in the progress of their nation. And sports stars and film stars are also citizens of the nation. So they also have social responsibility towards their nation. They should not have to promote bad products publicly which will be harmful to young people, such as alchohol,tobocco,etc .These products are very harmful for health of everyone. And if they promote them, then the young people immediately use them, because they think that if our role models do that , we can also do that. They do not think the harmful effects of those products.
Sports stars and movie stars are paid so much money for their performances by public. So we should expect them to fulfill the social responsibility towards nation. Their are so many examples in th world that reflect these good work by celebrities. Some of them are working with NGOs and help the poor people and do other social activities. By seeing these type of activities by stars, young people also think about that, and do their best in this field. Young people also get motivation by their role models.So if role models do social work and youth will also follow them. By this nation will progress definitely.
Youth is so precious for the nation. They are the one that rule over the nation. So if they are going on wrong way that is very harmful for them and for their family, then we have stop the m to do that. And young people always do whatever their role model does. So,if stars are doing good things and do social work and social activities, then young people also do that. And if stars promote that these things are bad for health and life, than young people donot do that and hopefully they divert to good direction,which will be helpful to them and the entire society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... so famous in public. Young people have an tendency towards them. They want to bec...
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Line 1, column 405, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...want to look like them, work like them. They do whatever their role model does, inst...
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Line 1, column 467, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... role model does, instead of seeing that it is good or right. They blindly follow...
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Line 1, column 490, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ad of seeing that it is good or right. They blindly follow their role model. So, sp...
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Line 1, column 642, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...cly, because they are being followed by nations youth. And nations youth is most import...
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Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , tobocco
...armful to young people, such as alchohol,tobocco,etc .These products are very harmful fo...
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Line 3, column 350, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ung people, such as alchohol,tobocco,etc .These products are very harmful for heal...
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Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: These
...g people, such as alchohol,tobocco,etc .These products are very harmful for health of...
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Line 3, column 528, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ey think that if our role models do that , we can also do that. They do not think ...
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Line 3, column 592, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...They do not think the harmful effects of those products. Sports stars and movi...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: There
...e social responsibility towards nation. Their are so many examples in th world that r...
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Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...lso get motivation by their role models.So if role models do social work and youth...
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Line 7, column 181, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'stopped'.
Suggestion: stopped
...them and for their family, then we have stop the m to do that. And young people alwa...
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Line 7, column 265, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , if
...ys do whatever their role model does. So,if stars are doing good things and do soci...
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Line 7, column 439, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...ese things are bad for health and life, than young people donot do that and hopefull...
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Line 7, column 514, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
... hopefully they divert to good direction,which will be helpful to them and the entire ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'then', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233067729084 0.240241500013 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.155378486056 0.157235817809 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0876494023904 0.0880659088768 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0597609561753 0.0497285424764 120% => OK
Pronouns: 0.093625498008 0.0444667217837 211% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.119521912351 0.12292977631 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0219123505976 0.0406280797675 54% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.33116936692 2.79330140395 83% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0199203187251 0.030933414821 64% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0657370517928 0.0997080785238 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0139442231076 0.0249443105267 56% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0119521912351 0.0148568991511 80% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2524.0 2732.02544248 92% => OK
No of words: 450.0 452.878318584 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60888888889 6.0361032391 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.264444444444 0.366273622748 72% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.16 0.280924506359 57% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0777777777778 0.200843997647 39% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0466666666667 0.132149295362 35% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.33116936692 2.79330140395 83% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 219.290929204 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.375555555556 0.48968727796 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.0888751869 55.4138127331 74% => OK
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6194690265 145% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.380412469 64% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2954665255 59.4972553346 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1333333333 141.124799967 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 23.380412469 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.2 0.674092028746 30% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.21349557522 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 31.0 51.4728631049 60% => OK
Elegance: 1.21290322581 1.64882698954 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426271046415 0.391690518653 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.173414386196 0.123202303941 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.137068539957 0.077325440228 177% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.451730289827 0.547984918172 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.129150074691 0.149214159877 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149094323794 0.161403998019 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764023234282 0.0892212321368 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.452366621202 0.385218514788 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0329565304917 0.0692045440612 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312702953552 0.275328986314 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215053184455 0.0653680567796 33% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88274336283 266% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 13.0 2.70907079646 480% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 26.0 13.5995575221 191% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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