Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals. Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
The topic being introduced by the claim on how the advice to follow your dreams should be emphasized on picking a worthy goal to begin with, is a contentious one. Admittedly, the reasoning the author provided on how many people's dreams are inherently selfish is true to certain extent. Nonetheless, the selfishness behind a dream is the exact thing that will help propelling the dreamer towards the dream itself. Not to mention when it comes to the worth of ones dreams, no one could and should be able to judge them.
First and foremost, no one in the world should and could determine the worth of others' goals in life. What is worthy to someone may or may not be worthy in others' eyes. The relativity of this worth is affected by a plethora of different factors regarding one's environment, family background, moral values, and many others. Not to mention, the worth of a condition is also a subject to change regarding to time. One dream that might seem silly and unworthy ten years ago might seem as not only worthy, but also a brilliant one today. Since no one can predict the future, no one could measure the worth of something in the days to come.
For instance, a hundred years ago, when for the first time someone uttered the idea of going to space as their dreams, they might be met with snickers and pat on their back from people trying to tell them to be realistic. Situation and even what we know as reality keeps changing from time to time. Therefore, no one should be allowed to deem other people's goals are unworthy just because they think it is.
Another important thing to be noted is that the term selfish could be defined in such a wide range of understanding. It is hard to disagree the inherent nature of dream in itself. It is only natural that one person's dream would be the one thing that would make them happy, thus it is quite true that it would definitely able to be correlated with the word selfish. However, we also need to remember that when a certain thing is making someone happy, it is not necessarily harming others either. Someone's dreams and happiness is not mutually exclusive to others' dreams and happiness.
To illustrate the mentioned argument, let us look at the example in which someone has a dream to become a very successful writer. Even if the dreams were propelled by an inherent selfishness of making money and being respected by society, the achievement of the dream in itself would by no means projects harms towards other members of the community. In the contrary, if the dreamer has achieved the goal and became a great and successful writer, the books that they write might affect the lives of many other members of community. The inherent selfishness of someone's dream should not make us limit the dreams in itself.
Following one's dreams is a way for people to reach for the stars with determination and preservation. These are the way for people to grow and flourish. Dreams engender strong and motivated community members that will move them all forwards. The inherent selfishness of the dream itself should never stop one from achieving it. Nor should the unworthiness of those dreams in the eyes of others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 371, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to propel' or 'propel'.
Suggestion: to propel; propel
...dream is the exact thing that will help propelling the dreamer towards the dream itself. N...
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Line 1, column 465, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...o mention when it comes to the worth of ones dreams, no one could and should be able...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'nonetheless', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for instance', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.22049689441 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.156832298137 0.157235817809 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0745341614907 0.0880659088768 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0496894409938 0.0497285424764 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0419254658385 0.0444667217837 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10248447205 0.12292977631 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0450310559006 0.0406280797675 111% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.71086952973 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0388198757764 0.030933414821 125% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.105590062112 0.0997080785238 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0372670807453 0.0249443105267 149% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0186335403727 0.0148568991511 125% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3236.0 2732.02544248 118% => OK
No of words: 558.0 452.878318584 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79928315412 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.58838876751 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.310035842294 0.366273622748 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.23476702509 0.280924506359 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.154121863799 0.200843997647 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116487455197 0.132149295362 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71086952973 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 219.290929204 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458781362007 0.48968727796 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.4336927899 55.4138127331 98% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6194690265 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.6666666667 23.380412469 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3100127407 59.4972553346 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.851851852 141.124799967 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 23.380412469 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.518518518519 0.674092028746 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 44.1433691756 51.4728631049 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.48125 1.64882698954 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30281743433 0.391690518653 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.131015585679 0.123202303941 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0899344766988 0.077325440228 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.549011813413 0.547984918172 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.125693660673 0.149214159877 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121567289256 0.161403998019 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809584902793 0.0892212321368 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.365552805871 0.385218514788 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0910590580396 0.0692045440612 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211616461926 0.275328986314 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729104492422 0.0653680567796 112% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.4325221239 182% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 7.22455752212 208% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.