The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
It is true that people have a better life style when they have more free time on their hands. Increased leisure time means enhanced well-being as one can pursue their hobbies in this time instead of doing mundane work all day. But the primary purpose of technology should not be to increase the leisure time. It should have a nobler goal. The side product can be increased efficiency, but is should not be the sole purpose of it.
Firstly, more leisure time for people is not always beneficial. When machines become efficient than humans, they replace them. When one can replace his employees for machines that are more efficient, less error prone and can work more hours, he is likely to make the shift. This will lead to unemployment, especially in a world where increasing population is a concern. Previously, during the industrial revolution, skilful workers lost their daily means for this reason. Also, even if unemployment is not a problem, man can seldom wisely use the extra time he is given each day by advancements in technology. If this time is wisely used, only then does technology offer any benefits. Hence, free time does not always translate to good time.
Secondly, technology should strive for a goal that is more noble and ambitious than merely increasing efficiency. Simply accelerating the rate or decreasing the waste, which increase efficiency, leaves little room for technology to explore innovative ideas. Technology should be a tool that helps the researchers and theoreticians to measure elusive phenomena that govern the world we live in. Space and ocean explorations are the ambitious projects that technology should help. In addition, break through in technology has helped save many lives by invention of new medicines. It has alleviated pain through invention of drugs like morphine and penicillin. It has helped reduce world hunger by genetic modification of seeds that germinate into crops with enhanced yields. Such uses of technology that seem more noble and ambitious help humanity more and therefore should be the aim of advancements.
Thus, the primary goal of technology should not be to increase the leisure time in everyday life, but to help life in a greater cause. Free time does not always have the desired positive effects that one hopes for. People will be replaced by efficient machines, leaving them jobless.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 390, Rule ID: IS_SHOULD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
...roduct can be increased efficiency, but is should not be the sole purpose of it. ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'in addition', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243619489559 0.240241500013 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.167053364269 0.157235817809 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.102088167053 0.0880659088768 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0672853828306 0.0497285424764 135% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0371229698376 0.0444667217837 83% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0951276102088 0.12292977631 77% => OK
Participles: 0.0348027842227 0.0406280797675 86% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69400794694 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0185614849188 0.030933414821 60% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0719257540603 0.0997080785238 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0348027842227 0.0249443105267 140% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.030162412993 0.0148568991511 203% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2360.0 2732.02544248 86% => OK
No of words: 388.0 452.878318584 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.0824742268 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363402061856 0.366273622748 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.260309278351 0.280924506359 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.185567010309 0.200843997647 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.14175257732 0.132149295362 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69400794694 2.79330140395 96% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 219.290929204 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538659793814 0.48968727796 110% => OK
Word variations: 60.3667989434 55.4138127331 109% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.1666666667 23.380412469 69% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7154277196 59.4972553346 52% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 141.124799967 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1666666667 23.380412469 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.674092028746 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 42.1975945017 51.4728631049 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.37606837607 1.64882698954 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40594405287 0.391690518653 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101702612575 0.123202303941 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0710770040825 0.077325440228 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.426164696556 0.547984918172 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.120037517536 0.149214159877 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131668327362 0.161403998019 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911690169927 0.0892212321368 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.256841731685 0.385218514788 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0464468107089 0.0692045440612 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285174122831 0.275328986314 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613409192395 0.0653680567796 94% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88274336283 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 15.0 7.22455752212 208% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 20.0 13.5995575221 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.