Successful people try new thing and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well. Support your answer with details and examples.
Comparing the amount of taking risks in successful people and typical ones that previous generation had to those of our generation, clearly shows that there has been a decline in both. Consequently, the result of this change has shown itself as the less booming in many societies. Although most people trend to do the ordinary ways of tasks which already known, successful ones go overbroad in risky tasks. Success is not limited to the IQ level, size of bank account and lucky, even they don’t born with a silver spoon. So that there is no exact formula, it is directly related to hardworking, innovation and taking risks. And among these factors, taking risks has a striking role for achieving the aim.
As point of departure, by studying the story life of successful people we would found that facing novel circumstances would lead them to the noticeable achievements. It is crystal clear, the idea that success people are risk-averse is a myth. In fact, their tendency to take logical risks than other people are much less rooted in nature than it is in the way of nurtured. But no matter why most people avoid taking risk, doing so many may be hurting them in the long run. Taking risk without any future plan could bring catastrophic consequences in the lifespan. Imagine you change your occupation, sale your home without any planning for future, how would detrimental effects had on your personal life? Every week, million dollars are spent, and won, on lottery tickets. Do you agree with this kind of taking risk? As a matter of fact, activities like taking part in lottery are a double-edged sword. While risk taking can clearly be personally and professionally beneficial, it doesn’t occur in a vacuum, either. People don’t benefit from risks without preparing to take them and educating themselves on the possible fall-out.
On the other hand, nature of human accompanies with willing of promoting in lifespan and this trait is obviously heighted in context of success people's life. Not only they have hemmed themselves in routine activities, but also they have evinced their interests in boosting by trying various tasks. Facing in the different circumstances opens doors for them and brings much more chances and opportunities for them. Were we realistic enough we would admit that human beings have worked hard during years to gurantee their future life. By facing new condition, they think that it is great opportunities and its allowing them to learn new things and take on a bigger role on career life.
As a closing remark, having mentioned some of the dominant arguments from both advocates and opponents of the issue, my advocacy seems to hold sway in this discussion, Hence, I would strongly support taking risk wisely since the benefits of this practice clearly outweigh its disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, may, so, while, in fact, kind of, as a matter of fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2363.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02765957447 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68524209793 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568085106383 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4163574352 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.739130435 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4347826087 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69565217391 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287336297584 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761020420284 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534459009236 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148908496364 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690442087685 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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