It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Selecting a job can be one of the most difficult issues for all people. In my opinion, it is a good idea that children select a job that is similar to their parents' job. Here you can see my reasons.
First, children have more opportunity to save their time. Nowadays, because of the economic criticism finding and establishing a job is a risky choice. And the safe action is gathering sufficient information to increase the possibility of becoming successful in their job . Collecting information can be done by internet or interviewing by a people who have a same job, but it takes a lot of time and some times people do not want to speak about their experiences. This is a negative aspect of individual researching for become a knowledgable person in a specific job. However, they can eliminate this part by choosing a job that are similar to their parents’s job to utilise from their information without spend their time. They can use from their time for doing other vital activities to extent their job.
Second, avoiding from mental disorders is another remarkable reason. Some times people face difficulties in their job that are hard for them to understand and solve them. Most of the time their education and there is not sufficent, and they need extra skills in other fields. They must spend a great amount of energy and suffer hardship conditions. Eventually, they might solve them, but they become exausted which gradually makes them disappoined or nervous person. When they elect a job which which is almost related to their parents’d job, they can want from parents to guid them to pass their problems.
Third, a similar job can strengthens the relationship between parents and children. By emerging modern technologies such as internet, people spend most of their time for learning or finding new friends. This situation causes a gap between family members. In fact, they should detect a way to spend their times with parents. When their job has adequate similarity, they spend most of their time with them because they must speak about issues that related to the job. Maybe, they spend a bit of their time about other issues; for example, speaking about different kinds of their families’ problems. This circumstance increases the relationship between family members.
In conclusion, saveing time, preventing from mental disorders, and improving children relationship with their parents are there advantages that can, convince people to elect a task which has similarity with their parents’ job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 271, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...lity of becoming successful in their job . Collecting information can be done by i...
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Line 3, column 489, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: which
...r nervous person. When they elect a job which which is almost related to their parents&apos...
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Line 4, column 26, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'strengthen'
Suggestion: strengthen
...eir problems. Third, a similar job can strengthens the relationship between parents and ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, third, for example, in conclusion, in fact, speaking about, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09615384615 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81717122567 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485576923077 0.524837075471 93% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2506714192 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.474250271294 0.236089414692 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157744645478 0.076458572812 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146007651319 0.0737576698707 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.324402286769 0.150856017488 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706818475963 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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