One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
This is one of the controversial issues among people because the result of that determines their children' future lives. I completely disagree with that claim that stimulating children by parents to take a part-time job is an appropriate way to prepare children for adult life.
First, it is more likely to waste children’ time. Nowadays, finding a job becomes one of the people's difficulties because of the unsuitable economic condition in the world. This situation makes employees prefer to hire a knowledgeable person. In other words, children must spend most of their time for studying to enlarge their knowledge and learning practical skills. As a result,by these activities, they can improve their chance of finding a job in the future.
Second, another significant reason is that teenage children avoid from the mental disorders. All of us know the job environment is suitable for adult people who can easily suffer the problems of the job and adverse manners of people.So, parents must consider this fact that these difficulties in the job can affect on children character; which take shape in teenage age. These effects can completely change children behaviour and make them a hopeless and disappointed person. The correct due to parents is preparing an enjoyable time for their kids in this age to make them a happy person. Children should do pleasure activities which give them sufficient energy to prepare for adult life which brings a lot of difficulties for them.
Third, the way of the people's lives completely alters during the time. By emerging the technology such as the internet, smartphone, and television people face with a new way of communication. One example is the social groups which replace with the ordinary way of communication. The social groups provide an excellent opportunity for children to familiarise with new people who help them to see and experience beneficial things. For example, they have this chance to find new friends who are older than them, but they are prosperous in their lives. This friendship is a good way for them to learn how to become a successful adult. So, they do not need to go out and do some job to prepare for the adult life.
In conclusion, there are a lot of advantages such as saving time, avoiding from mental disorders and learning a right way of living convince us that it is better for the teenage children do not do a part-time job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, third, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97277227723 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81259033555 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492574257426 0.524837075471 94% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8569316809 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.45 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.499388284699 0.236089414692 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14089169772 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.092926431491 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291051184167 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0870903698156 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.