The map show significant developments that took place at a village park during a 10 year period

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The map show significant developments that took place at a village park during a 10 year period.

The map show significant developments that took place at a village park during a 10 year period.
It is clear that from the maps that there are more facilities in the park now than the previous decade. The area for main sport, namely tennis court and football pitch became larger.
The tennis court has increased in size, making it twice times as large as it used to be. Children area is divided into two separate parts, namely children’s park and children’s softplay area. The football was expanded to the south. Similarly car park was lengthened to the south and it can contain 50 people instead of 20 people as before.
At present, a new picnic area is built to the south-east of the park. The pond occupied the area that is now used for a boating lake. It is also noted that woods in the south-west part the park were redeveloped as a café and toilets.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'shows'.
Suggestion: shows
The map show significant developments that took plac...
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Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ldren's softplay area. The football was expanded to the south. Similarly car...
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Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...he football was expanded to the south. Similarly car park was lengthened to the south an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, similarly, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 33.7804878049 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 715.0 965.302439024 74% => OK
No of words: 156.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58333333333 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59768868844 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 216.9 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The sentence length is short
Sentence length SD: 21.6850178695 43.030603864 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.5 112.824112599 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302401215032 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130994592194 0.103423049105 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.291998650616 0.0843802449381 346% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.295150737392 0.15604864568 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.407212098323 0.0819641961636 497% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 13.2329268293 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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