Some people think the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated.
Discuss both side and give your opinion.
My writing
The internet is claimed to be the useful tool which has helped the humans a lot in shortening the distance between people from all over the world. On the other hand, there are a myriad of people who have the dissent with that statement because the disadvantages they can see. From my point of view, this modern equipment is destroying our relationship.
First of all, we cannot deny that just in a few years, with the springing up of the technology, our life has been changed for the better. In particularly, computer or internet is becoming more prevalent than ever before because of its progress' benefits. From making the communication in unlimited distance become possible to building a world in internet where every people can meet and share what they concern about, our life has a lot of improvements lean on this current equipment.
Secondly, on account of the benefits, this has led to a lot of unexpected disadvantages. With the growing up of the virtual world, more and more people are falling deep down in this and building their own shell behind the computers where they spend most time with.They are day by day losing their courage to face the world outside and cower themselves to become smaller and smaller. This made a lot of the teenagers losing their own value and lost their confident in themselves.
Lastly, not only like that, the virtual world also has destroyed a lot people' life. With the breakneck speed of transmission, just one wrong or fake information can erect people' stance on others. For example, just some misunderstanding comments can cause a fight easily. moreover, this world give chance for cowards to express their thinking about others delightly without the afraid of others' judgement.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that internet has brought to us a lot of significant advantages,. However, because of the humans' overused, they are losing their confident and become more heartless, our relationship become more and more isolated.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: myriads
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, in particular, in short, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06024096386 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77760495261 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55421686747 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1809438066 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1333333333 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209181266054 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672563631529 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046336625638 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123587754313 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370448630276 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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