Some people believe the youth can benefit from a wide range of information on the Internet while other people think unrestricted online information can affect the youth negatively. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.
In the modern world, human's life quality has been drastically enhanced because of various life-altering benefits brought by the internet. It is commonly believed that the youth can benefit a lot from a variety of information on the internet. However, others believe that some information may has adverse impacts on them.
It is reasonable to believe that online information is useful to most teenagers. First of all, young students are able to expand their knowledge in different domains, including science, liberal arts and et cetera, by searching relevant information. It is beneficial to their academic study. Additionally, a range of information also plays a significant role in informing young people of everyday occurrences. For instance, they can visit a series of news websites to find their interesting topics such as international or national news stories, which could promote their understanding of the trend or mainstream of the world.
On the other hand, it is also worth mentioning that the young can also be negatively affected by a massive amount of unlimited information. Firstly, a large number of web pages, which contain the information related to anti-social actions, could make the youth develop a tendency to commit offences, because most of them are psychologically and mentally immature, and have no self-discipline, thereby prone to a series of temptations. Besides, young people might become extremely radical by reading too many politic articles since they cannot consider in a comprehensive and objective way.
To conclude with my opinion, it is unquestionable that the young are able to obtain the knowledge from a wide range of information on the internet. However, some information could also cloud their judgment on social norm and mislead them. Overall, the upsides outweigh the downsides.
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others believe that some information may has adverse impacts on them.
others believe that some information may have adverse impacts on them. //'them' refers to what?
flaws:
Need to use more different verbs. Read a sample:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 286 350
No. of Characters: 1502 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.112 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.252 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.025 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.203 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ount of unlimited information. Firstly, a large number of web pages, which contain the informatio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, for instance, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40909090909 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12359117835 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594405594406 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2812205393 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299417851137 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101269459049 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100420205761 0.0667982634062 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178330565749 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649123607542 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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