Tpo 46. The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
In every society, celebrities have a major role in people's lives because they are like a hero for most of the people. In my opinion, nowadays young people do not pay attention to celebrities and famous people's view more than old people. Here you can see my reasons.
First, today, young people are completely busy and do not have enough time. Today, by emerging economic crisis around the world, finding an appropriate job becomes one of the difficulties in young people's lives. So, they have to spend their time either for learning vital and useful skills or broaden their knowledge. Hence, the young people's time is precious because they can by utilising their time in a beneficial way, improve their chance of getting a job. However, most of the old people are retirement and have free time to pay attention to famous people' lives and act like them.
Second, altering the young people's view of the famous people is another noticeable reason.Todays, world change widely and people, face with a huge advancement and improvement in the different field of science and technology such as the internet, nanotechnology, and the others. So, young people are aware of all aspects of the famous people. They know that the celebrities do a lot of adverse activities. This awareness helps youth to think more about their idol. And we see how now they prefer to act like prosperous people who are successful in their education or some vital jobs such as doctors, engineers.
On the other hand, some people think that celebrities are the young people's idol. Chiefly, most of the youth wear, makeup and speak like famous people. In fact, young people pay attention more to the fashion than old people, and because the celebrities are pioneers in fashion, they act like them. However, I still declare that young people do not pay attention to the prominent people's view. Actually, all of the market in the world for earning more money, try to produce clothes according to celebrities idea. So, it is apparent that they style of the young people be like them. Also, when they grow and enter into the society like universities, they prefer to act like their professor instead of the famous people.
According to my passage, it is clear that young people do not care about the celebrities' opinion more than old people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, hence, however, if, second, so, still, in fact, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85532994924 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51607857494 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456852791878 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1080465248 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0952380952 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7619047619 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25329530062 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940472739402 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616729039248 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183721208795 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464739045466 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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