Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.
Nowadays people are free to make a lot of options related to food. Some of them argue that eating meat or fish have fundamentaly beneficial influence on our planet and own life, while many others contend that it has a detrimentaly effect as well. To my view of thinking, meat and fish are one of most important material for our normal health condition, due to this it is harmful to refuse it absolutely.
Firtly, meat and fish provide a lot of useful vitamins. It is extremely necessary for our normal vital processes such us growing or maturing. Lacf of this material causes serious disabilities. Moreover, the amount of fish and animal should be regulated due to the shortage of feed in the water and earth which is needed.
From the other side, the destruction of fish and animal could cause a disappearance of specific species. For instance, there are a lot of special species of fish that are written into a red book but still killing ilegally. This negalive asspect provide harmful acquitances which should be solved globally.
In my opinion, people should not refuse it totally because it make negative influence on their health. I convinced that this problem could be solved by smaller quantity of meat and fish. This sollution guarantees a smaller request of these products and positive effect on balance of living organisms on earth.
Taking these points into consideration, I would like to say that there some advantages and disadvantages bought by eating meat and fish. However, in my opinion, the supply of this product should be regulated very carefully saving the balance of these organisms, but nobody should refuse this material wholly due to useful materials which are taken.
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Sentence: Some of them argue that eating meat or fish have fundamentaly beneficial influence on our planet and own life, while many others contend that it has a detrimentaly effect as well.
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Sentence: Moreover, the amout of fish and animal should be regulated due to the shortage of feed in the water and earth which is needed.
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Sentence: For instance, there are a lot of special species of fish that are written into a red book but still killing ilegally.
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Sentence: This negalive asspect provide harmful acquitances which should be solved globally.
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Sentence: This sollution guarantees a smaller request of these products and positive effect on balance of living organisms on earth.
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