Some people believe that crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is argued that people who grow up in poverty or go through social problems are likely to commit a crime, while the opponents of this idea think that a result of crime stems from bad nature. In my opinion, it seems to me that crime is the product of deep psychological wounds relating to social conditions.
On the one hand, there is a belief that a person’s nature determines whether or not become a criminal. Firstly, some argue that an individual who is cruel turns to crime more easily than a kind person. For instance, a child bullying other boys or girls at school may turn into a violent criminal in the future. Secondly, bad characteristics such as laziness or selfishness could also breed future offenders, who seek to acquire easy money without working for it. A number of youngsters choose to steal from others, instead of working hard to make an honest living. There are strong reasons for thinking that those who have an inborn bad nature are more likely to break the law.
On the other hand, it seems to me that it is believed that the community should take responsibility for making crime. One reason is that there are many problems in society which might lead to an increase in the crime rate. For example, unemployment pushes people into resorting to crime because they simply cannot find a job. As a consequence, the number of offenders has climbed in many countries over recent decades. Another reason is that, more broadly, poverty in general leads to a rise in crime. If people do not have enough money to make ends meet, they will be tempted to pursue illegal activities just to support themselves and their families.
In conclusion, although both view have some validity, it seems to me that the principal causes of crime are a results of social conditions and problems.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... that a person's nature determines whether or not become a criminal. Firstly, some argue ...
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Line 7, column 109, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
... that the principal causes of crime are a results of social conditions and problems.
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in general, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75238095238 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60715143387 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587301587302 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4179911715 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.8 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.9879759519 326% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312229248998 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898117641715 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828660242016 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200814267661 0.151304729494 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0829486124175 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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