Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? Give specific reasons and examples.
Sometimes people need to destroy old buildings and build new one. They could have some reasons such as earning money from new building or demanding to live in modern buildings. But they could not think that the old buildings have historical importance and it could be important some people like old family members. I think they think that they have an other option which the buildings is protected and restorated. In my writing I will explain two important reasons why people should keep the old buildings alive.
Firstly, the old and historic buildings reflect the city’s history. When foreign people come to city they examine the building’s structure and take information from this structure about city. For example, My spanish friends came to visit to me in Turkey and we took a tour. They took a lot of photograph the buildings which are old I noticed that they were fairly careful when they took a photograph. They wanted to take all details. When I asked them that why they were careful one of my friends answered to me they would use those photographs to determine my city’s characteristic. I had never heard that before that day.
Secondly the fact that, the old buildings are quite important for old people like my grandfather. They grew in that buildings and have a lot of memory about those buildings. For example, My grandfather told me that He remembered our building’s construction and almost sixty years ago it was built. I understand him and his feelings about our house. He said to me a lot of memory which experienced in our house. If I were him I would feel same with him. The old people’s request is important for me and so I think if it does not require the old buildings must not be destroyed.
To sum up, due to the historical significance and importance for old people, the old and historical buildings must be protected. People might need to modern buildings but they think these reasons and after that they have to decide about their buildings.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: AN_OTHER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'another'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: another
...bers. I think they think that they have an other option which the buildings is protected...
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Line 3, column 295, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun photograph seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of photographs'.
Suggestion: a lot of photographs
...in Turkey and we took a tour. They took a lot of photograph the buildings which are old I noticed t...
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Line 5, column 417, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... memory which experienced in our house. If I were him I would feel same with him. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83430232558 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7903206504 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473837209302 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7583220576 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1904761905 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.380952381 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252446525803 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880975937231 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717507834691 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173700744178 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458159737572 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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