GMAT Analysis essay - Some people believe that increasing violence in media is the cause of increasing violence in society, especially among children. Others believe children’s peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on chi

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GMAT Analysis essay - Some people believe that increasing violence in media is the cause of increasing violence in society, especially among children. Others believe children’s peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on chi

Some people believe that increasing violence in media is the cause of increasing violence in society, especially among children. Others believe children’s peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children’s behavior.

Increasing violence in the society is a problem manifested by media to a certain extent. Media with insatiate appetite for higher ratings crosses the line between what is news worthy and what is glorification of current events with violence. No parents want to be a violent role model for their children. Yes peer pressure is an important inf...

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Sentence: When people are depending on the newspaper there is 24 hour gap between when the incident occurring and receiving the news, which kind of reduces the intensity of the incident.
Description: The token of is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to of and reduces

Sentence: There is an interview with the kids who are young children when September 11 incident happened, most of the then children choose to join the military, because they somehow felt in a deep way they need to involve in defending the country.
Description: The word then is not usually used as an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to then

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Score: 6.0 out of 6
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 422 350
No. of Characters: 2051 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.532 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.86 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.624 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.637 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.273 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5

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