With the pressures on today’s young people to succeed academically,
some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery)
should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In 21st century people are working in diverse fields which were non-existent few decades before and many more are going to become obsolete in years to come. Some people argue there is no place for non-academic subjects are useless in school syllabus and only academic subjects should be taught but i beg to differ with this view.
Admittedly, children who are excel in academics and gain degrees from top universities generally find it easier to secure a job and finally take top positions in public and private sectors for instance Prime Minister Manmohan Singh of India had secured his doctora...
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Sentence: Some people argue there is no place for non-academic subjects are useless in school syllabus and only academic subjects should be taught but i beg to differ with this view.
Suggestion: Some people argue there is no place for non-academic subjects which are useless in school syllabus and only academic subjects should be taught but i beg to differ with this view.
Sentence: Segregating children on basis of academic and non-academic performance can allows teachers to employ methodologies which suites class of students and many non-academic subjects like cokkery and home science which mainly help female child can be made optional.
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