There will be a traditional celebration in your country. You want to invite your friend from English-speaking country. Write him/her a letter and
• Invite your friend
• Explain wht happens at the party
• Describe the traditional and why it is important in your country
• Say why it is important for you friend to be there
Dear Immalombazzi
I hope this letter catch you in healthy condition and has spirit to survive in your activity. I invite you to attend in celebrate our traditional festival Mindio in my country. As I saw when we were studying together in your country 2 years ago, you promised to me that you want to visit my home. I think this is the best moment to come in my country.
Mindio is one of festival celebrate which is only in February and once in 5 years. In this celebrate people would go to mountain and find waterfall and they would swim in this place. I know this is one of your hobbies to climb and walk for long distance in forest. After swimming, all of members who join in this festival would talk their dream in their future. A festival very interesting to me that is why I ask you to join us.
Since I finished my study at the time, I am come back to my hometown and told to my parents about our relation and they hope could see you in next time. They would very glad if you could your spend you holiday in this festival.
Your friend
Immatawang
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Sentence: I hope this letter catch you in healthy condition and has spirit to survive in your activity.
Description: The fragment letter catch you is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace catch with verb, past tense
Sentence: I invite you to attend in celebrate our traditional festival Mindio in my country.
Description: The token in is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to in and celebrate
Sentence: Mindio is one of festival celebrate which is only in February and once in 5 years.
Description: The fragment festival celebrate which is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace celebrate with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Sentence: Since I finished my study at the time, I am come back to my hometown and told to my parents about our relation and they hope could see you in next time.
Description: A verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive is not usually followed by a modal auxillary
Suggestion: Refer to hope and could
Sentence: They would very glad if you could your spend you holiday in this festival.
Description: A determiner, possessive is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to your and spend
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 197 200
No. of Characters: 799 1000
No. of Different Words: 108 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.746 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.056 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.192 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 42 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 32 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 23 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 7 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.468 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.182 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.416 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.574 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.181 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4