How do movies or television influence people’s behavior? Use reasons
and specific examples to support your answer.
Technology in all its forms has become an integral part of our daily lives. Many inventions facilitate our life such as, telephone, car, internet, computers and etc. The most popular one is the television; it exists in every house in the whole world. Television is double-edged sword has advantages and disadvantages and both can affect the behavior of people that I will explain it in my essay.
First of all, television is an important part of life for many due to its benefit. Television is the effective way of communication between all the countries. Television makes the big world like small ...
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Sentence: Television makes
Sentence: Television makes the big world like small village, it deliveries the information and the news to large number of people very quickly, so the people can built a good background of other culture and to be up to date with what happen in the surrounding.
Suggestion: Television makes the big world like small village, it deliveries the information and the news to large number of people very quickly, so the people can build a good background of other culture and to be up to date with what happen in the surrounding.
Sentence: Watching TV for long hours can affect our social life, it will damage the social relationship due to spend a lot of time watching TV without communicate with other which limits the number of friends and separates us from the real world.
Suggestion: Watching TV for long hours can affect our social life, it will damage the social relationship due to spending a lot of time watching TV without communicating with others which limit the number of friends and separate us from the real world.
Sentence: Television makes the big world like small village, it deliveries the information and the news to large number of people very quickly, so the people can built a good background of other culture and to be up to date with what happen in the surrounding.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to can and built
Sentence: Watching TV for long hours can affect our social life, it will damage the social relationship due to spend a lot of time watching TV without communicate with other which limits the number of friends and separates us from the real world.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to without and communicate
Description: A determiner/pronoun, post-determiner is not usually followed by a WH-determiner
Suggestion: Refer to other and which
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