Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior
We are influenced by everything that surrounds us. Man learns from people around him, he is influenced by the circumstances surrounding him. The way a child is brought up, the way the young generation responds to the events in the society would be indicative of how they finally turn out to be as individuals. The issue here raises a question, whether the media or parents and peer groups have a greater influence on today's generation.
The topic here is serious, and a lot of time has to be devoted to understand why the current generation has been indulging in acts of violence. While it would b...
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Sentence: The young minds tend to imitate the people around them , while it is the duty of parents, friends, relatives to nurture a child it grow up to be a educated individual, who would make valuable contributions to the society, they must also ensure that young generation does not walk down the wrong path, that they would regret later on in their lives.
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