Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.
Nowadays, the number of renown persons, who are familiar and popular for most of the human race, are significant. In any time in a day, if you turn your TV on, with a high probability you will confront with one of their TV shows. This happening will not be ended in this point; nevertheless, all kind of media, such has television, newspaper and etc pay too much attention and consideration to their private lives. These media act in this way because of some substantial reasons:
First of all, all of them have the goal of alluring more audiences. Since these famous persons are popular and admire...
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Moreover, most of the people are eager to not only know about their concerts, performances and shows but also they are curious to find out their personal lives.
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Sentence: I was supprised more when I saw the people and broadcasters who were rapidly taking photos of her.
Error: supprised Suggestion: surprised
Sentence: As a summary, I favor the statement that the television, newspapers, magazines and other media pay extereme attention to the personal lives of famous people.
Error: extereme Suggestion: extreme
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