Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Nowadays, people spend a lot of time to watch movies or sport contests so that people know artists and athletes and follow their lives. As a result, their behavior and lives of these people have many fans and they face different problems. Many people deem that famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. However, others hold an opposite view. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelming. Among the two opinions, I agree with the former one more. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
To begin with, the first exquisite point to be mentioned is that these famous people have a hard job and face a lot of stress during their working. To clarify, I refer to the famous football player like Ronaldo, his behavior follows with his fans and sometimes he cannot do some things and if he has a bad behavior in his life, the newspapers will report it as soon as possible. Therefore, these famous people cannot enjoy from different things and they should control a lot of subjects and this factor can have an influence on their jobs and decrease their efficiency. Moreover, today, the competition between people is very hard so that people, especially celebrities suffer from this problem and because of this reason, if they do wrong things, they will lose their fans and it has an effect on their job.
Second, there is another reason that deserves some words here. If these people do not satisfy of their lives because of lacking the privacy, they will have mental and physical problems. To illustrate this fact, they cannot do a lot of their hobbies so that it makes them depressed. Take a well-known actress as an example, she has an important position in Iranian cinema and she took part in a private party a few years ago and the newspapers published her picture in that party. As a result, she was not allowed to play films anymore and this issue made her distressed.
To wrap it up, from what I discussed above, I safely come to this conclusion that popular people such as entertainers and athletes need more privacy than they have now. To summarize reasons, not only can famous people face problems with their jobs but also difficulties in their lives because of the absence of privacy. Thus, although the development of technology makes it easy to access to the privacy of celebrities, I believe that each person deserves privacy, particularly famous entertainers and athletes and we should respect their rights.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2146.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86621315193 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59465528614 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512471655329 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0693756166 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.947368421 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2105263158 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322659896936 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114398303061 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.191173412105 0.0737576698707 259% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229184600123 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126929788688 0.0645574589148 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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