it is observed that people these day spend large sum of money on cloths, hair care and other beauty products. some people see it as a necessary expenditure whereas other see it ad wastage of money.
do you agree or disagree
we are in living in a competitive era of 21st century where it has become indispensable to look good or presentable. Due to this, people spend enormous amount of money on beauty products, garments, accessories and so on. some people assert it is justifiable, while other have negative views. Here, i am personally inclined it is wastage of money.
To set in, there are multifarious reason why i support this idea. First and foremost, it creats artificial identity which can be displayed to the world, which in time may leads to severe psychological problems such as stress, depression. Moreover, p...
Sentence: First and foremost, it creats artificial identity which can be displayed to the world, which in time may leads to severe psychological problems such as stress, depression.
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Sentence: Furthermore, it leave impact on social and culture structure, As it arise negative traits among people like as jealous, crime, feeling of envy, cheating and many more.
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Sentence: To illustrate, A recent scientific survey has shown that masses usually eighty percent of income spend on fashionable product and another accessories rather than saving and productive works.
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Sentence: On the contrary, some proportion of folk consider that to survive in this modern world looking good is essential in otder to maintain standard in society.
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Sentence: First and foremost, it creats artificial identity which can be displayed to the world, which in time may leads to severe psychological problems such as stress, depression.
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Sentence: Moreover, people have super flous desire to look attractive and they consume incredible outlay on these superficial and artificial products, which may create hole in one,s pocket.
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Sentence: On the contrary, some proportion of folk consider that to survive in this modern world looking good is essential in otder to maintain standard in society.
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Sentence: Untill unless one,s has not fascinating personality u can not join in various front offiece jobs like assistent manager, receptionist job, air hostes, marketers jobs in many sector.
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