(altered) In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
For generations in many countries, young adults have been encouraged to take a gap year after high school. Below merits and drawbacks of the prospect will be discussed in details.
On the one hand, there are several benefits of the tradition. Firstly, studying at high school and preparation for the final exams is challenging and difficult. In fact, many students are so exhausted that they may have a nervous breakdown. Many psychologists suggest having a journey as a proper medicine to the problem. Thus, those who decide to spend a year on travelling will surely get rested and revitalized by the new experience. Secondly, some young individuals do not have needed financial resources to pay for studying at university. One year gap gives them a possibility to earn and save up some money. In fact, a person who has been working intensively for twelve months in a row may make enough money to start tertiary education. Those are several benefits that are acquired via having a year gap.
On the other hand, there are some disadvantages as well. For example, a person who became financially independent will probably detest the idea of giving it up for studying. Statistics shows that the majority of those who began working after school have never pursued a degree and a likely reason to this is that living on your own, being free from parents’ rules is an awesome experience. Secondly, having the long one-year vocation may have a negative impact on students’ academic records. For instance, young adults who did not take a gap year are more likely to graduate from university than those who took it. It seems that to study successfully a person should be able to recall a lot of information from a school program and the data is well-remembered by those who went from school to university directly and forgotten by those who had a long vacation. Those are a few negative facets of the custom.
In conclusion, the custom of having a year vocation between school and university has some drawbacks and merits and each person has a right to decide what is better for him or her.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
This is not the TOEFL style.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 02
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 359 350
No. of Characters: 1687 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.699 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.664 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.419 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.456 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86072423398 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81093692151 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523676880223 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3982723701 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8421052632 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294013295742 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848893212386 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068936704621 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193549810892 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00544519957214 0.0645574589148 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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