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In this day and age, the idea stating that sports starts and glamorous film start act as a role model for youngsters has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many, a substantial number of people hold true the notion that celebrities, whether famous sports persons or movies starts, are becoming role models for the youth. Personally, I am inclined to highly accept that this phenomenon has significant disadvantages. This will be analyzed in this essay before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.
For one, it is commonly accepted that in many number of cases, famous film stars an athletes may advertise illegal drugs consciously on unconsciously. Take the famous Iranian bodybuilder, Arian Ataee, for example. The 2 times winner turns out to be on steroid-like performance enhancing drugs, which surely cause significant health problems. This example fortifies the argument that famous people fail to provide a good and healthy lifestyle even for themselves. Thus, it is quite evident why they cannot act as a role model for the youngsters.
In addition to this, it is argued that sportsperson and successful actors or actresses do not have significant academic education. To put this into consideration, a recent article published by the Journal of Modern Education on 351 football players conducted by Michigan State University, has revealed that children imitating famous soccer players score 22% less in their final exam. Therefore, it is now coherent why the idea that celebrities should not become role model for children has garnered support.
To recapitulate, after analyzing the issue of unsuccessful lifestyles as well as lack of decent education levels, it is felt that sport starts and glamorous film stars cannot act as a positive role model.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 42, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'many numbers'.
Suggestion: many numbers
...or one, it is commonly accepted that in many number of cases, famous film stars an athletes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 8.36945812808 84% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 20.9802955665 119% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 31.9359605911 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1207.87684729 123% => OK
No of words: 282.0 242.827586207 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28368794326 5.00649968141 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92555555546 2.71678728327 108% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 139.433497537 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63475177305 0.580463131201 109% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 379.143842365 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.6157635468 173% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1647367799 50.4703680194 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.615384615 104.977214359 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.9669160288 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 7.25397266985 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.242375264174 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0925447433944 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.071462118173 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.151781067708 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0609392437508 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 12.6369458128 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.1260098522 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.9458128079 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 11.5310837438 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.32886699507 117% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 55.0591133005 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.5123152709 95% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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