Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The decisions that we make is really important in our lives. By making a wrong dicision we may destroy our future completely. Some people believe that in todays world, young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives; others would disagree. In my view the youth still depend on their parents to make decisions for them for the following reasons.
First and foremost, parents are really knowlegable and they always try to help their children to make the best decisions for their lives and decide about a lot things is not as easy as they seem. For instance, five years ago, when I wanted to attend the univesity of NewYork, I thought that it is good to follow my pasion and study art. I search the Net a lot and all the websites said that being an artist is great and help you to be successful. After talking with my parents, my father said that it is not a good way and I would definitely ruin my entire life if I chose that major. At first I got angry because being an artist was something that made me happy and whenever I spent time on my paintings I forgot everything. But I decided to do what my father suggested and it was to study mechanical engineering which was my second choice and spend my free time on painting. He also found a great teacher who tutor me in the weekends. Now after five years, I am glad that I follow my father's instruction and I feel that I would never be able to be as successful as I am now. This experience thought me that my parents are more reliable than some unknown people on the Internet because they are concern about my life.
Second, it is true that young people are well-educated and they can think better that young people in the past, but it is important to concider the fact that the problems and difficulties that these people are facing are more complex too. For example, the only thing that young people have to concider in their lives about twenty years ago was finding a job which was always available for them when they grew up and marrying and starting their own family. But now, with advancements in technology and all the advantages that it bings to human's lives, it is important to know that there are a lot more difficulties that young people encounter when they become adolescent such as studying in the university, their major, find a job, great income, find a house and even finding a reliable friend or also spouse is really difficult too.
In sum, though sum may believe that today the youth are more knowlegable are they have the ability to make important decisions without the help of their parents, as you can see their lives become more complex and as a result not only are they not independent from their parents, but also they need that more than any time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...difficulties that young people encounter when they become adolescent such as stud...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, still, well, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, such as, as a result, in my view, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2251.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48406374502 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38801088577 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456175298805 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.6576251427 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.411764706 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5294117647 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58823529412 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346176337734 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119258677267 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121650200533 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244547578294 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148444509113 0.0645574589148 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.3 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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