Describe one event of your country's history, and explain why it was important.Provide clear explanations and details in support of your answer.
I clearly remember my country history event. I never forgot how we got the indepedence from British majesty. Yes, You guess right I am talking about India before 67 years back. That time we all were slave of British goverment. I read it from my history book and also my gradparent told me lot of ture stories about How we got the dependence .How all Indian pepole fought against the British goverment.
It was not only one man work .It included all men ,women,chlidren,old age people that means each and every people fought to got dependence.This fight was started from 1857 by Mangal Pande ,who was the solider in the British army. All India are believe in God and they never ate any type of meat. But the Britiash government told Indian army people to used the gun bullets which were convered with the skin of pig and cow. soldier had to break that cover with the help of their teet, which was very disgusting things for them. So Mangal pande started fight against that contravercy. That attcak was fail. However all Indian got power to go against Biritish.
Meanwhile , Mahatam Gandhi,Jawaharlal Neheru, Bahagt Singh all these national leader were comeforwad to get Independence. Everybody used their startegy to how to get free from them. Mahatam Gandhi who was one of the leader , was playing very important role for getting freedom. He used non volience route to achive the freedom. He started Dandi yatra in which they banned on imported things like cloths and foods item. They took oth alway use Indain things.
All these leader fought aganist freedom so that now you are free and can live quietly in Indian. Otherwise still we have to follow the Britinisim.Thank to all who fight for us.
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Sentence: It was not only one man work .It included all men ,women,chlidren,old age people that means each and every people fought to got dependence.This fight was started from 1857 by Mangal Pande ,who was the solider in the British army.
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Sentence: All India are believe in God and they never ate any type of meat.
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Sentence: But the Britiash government told Indian army people to used the gun bullets which were convered with the skin of pig and cow. soldier had to break that cover with the help of their teet, which was very disgusting things for them.
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Sentence: I never forgot how we got the indepedence from British majesty.
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Sentence: That time we all were slave of British goverment.
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Sentence: I read it from my history book and also my gradparent told me lot of ture stories about How we got the dependence .How all Indian pepole fought against the British goverment.
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Sentence: It was not only one man work .It included all men ,women,chlidren,old age people that means each and every people fought to got dependence.This fight was started from 1857 by Mangal Pande ,who was the solider in the British army.
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Sentence: Meanwhile , Mahatam Gandhi,Jawaharlal Neheru, Bahagt Singh all these national leader were comeforwad to get Independence.
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Sentence: All these leader fought aganist freedom so that now you are free and can live quietly in Indian.
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