It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be tough to become a good sports person or musician.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
This 21th century, many successful people have been born in Indonesia. For instance, Fatin, the icon of energic young singer, was the winner of X-Factor Indonesia in 2013. Some people believe that to good at something people must have talents, but the other believe that we can good at something through hard working. This essay will examine these aspects.
Many parents today give their children many cources, especially in sports and arts, in order to make their children expert in it. Their children must practice every day. This brings result that not few children who practice much for many years become good sportsman or mucician.
On the other hand, we find obviously many musician or sportsman are famous because they have natural ability. The talented one is Gita Gutawa, who reached the awesome success as singer in their teenage age. Luckily for people who have talents, because talent is God-given that they can best at something since child, without study hard.
To sum up, I think taltents and hard work are the factors that contribute someone become expert at their interest. People who have talents can reach their goal more easily. But, if they do not practice, they cannot prove it. However, ordinary people who always practice hard and never give up can reach their goal even though it take a longer time.
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Sentence: To sum up, I think taltents and hard work are the factors that contribute someone become expert at their interest.
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