A statement issues that the most impressive attainment for every child is when they demonstrate ability to tune a musical instrument. However, I tend to become opponent of this due to some plausible reasons which I will explain in this essay.
A statement issues that the most impressive attainment for every child is when they demonstrate ability to tune a musical instrument. However, I tend to become opponent of this due to some plausible reasons which I will explain in this essay.
On the one hand, it might be said that the skill to play wonderful music benefits children to adopt positive attitude. This is because the process to acquire this skill would consequently stimulate personal development of learning for them to be taken place in daily life. This could be taken towards how musicians learn constantly to tune instrument, in which they should listen avidly with infinite patience.
Conversely, in my perspective, playing musical instrument could offer drawbacks for children. This activity, ranging from listening instrument to understanding time signature, allows a significant amount of time. They thus would have inappropriate time to study in terms of educational objective that should be successfully pursued. Moreover, I am convinced that not all children greatly enjoy music. The benefit above would not probably be gained if a child just took a seat and heard the sound, without any sense of eagerness. For those kids who have other passions, it thus would be more essential to engage in other pursuits instead of musical achievement. Example can be seen in active sport activities which are obviously advantageous for not only cognition or attitude but also their physical health.
In conclusion, in spite of the potential benefits, it is clear to me that achievement of a musical instrument could not be vital for any child. Hence, the successful pursuit for children is certainly conditional on child’s interest.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, hence, however, if, moreover, so, thus, in conclusion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1436.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27941176471 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94620892993 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643382352941 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.8963948682 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.571428571 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41119103778 0.244688304435 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138346221357 0.084324248473 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.183693508601 0.0667982634062 275% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.344264063123 0.151304729494 228% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.378893595937 0.056905535591 666% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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