Though modern agricultural practices damage the environment, feeding the world’s growing population is more important than protecting against environmental damage.
The importance of agriculture as opposed to the environment for a country raises much public attention in recent decades when agricultural practices bring much damage to the environment. Some experts claim that agriculture is of more significance as feeding the world’s growing population is more important than protecting against environment damage, while others hold a different opinion. As far as I am concerned, the latter view seems to align more with my view. Here are my reasons.
First, the environment problems are so serious that if they are ignored, there would be no place for human to survive, which makes planting more food meaningless. Water and air pollution, desertification and global warming already have a great influence in our daily life, and even threaten our physical health. As we all know, Beijing, the capital of China, suffers from serious air pollution problems. Exhaust fume from the factory and vehicle emissions make the air full of tiny particles, which once are breathed in by people, pose a potentially high risk to the respiratory system and other internal organs in an irreversible way. When humans even cannot find a clean place to live in, what is the meaning of improving food productivity?
Second, the money needed for solving the environment problems caused by agricultural practices might be far more than the economy value made by all people. Sure, it may seem that the development of industry and agriculture without regard of the environment protection boosts economy for the time being, but eventually, such kind of development has an adverse effect on economy in the long term. Consider a food company as an example. For decades, it was allowed to pour contaminating chemicals into a river, and in this way it earned more profit as well as brought more revenues to the government[In this way. However, those chemicals were toxic, bringing great threat to the fish and plants living in the river and nearby. In order to cope with the water pollution, the government has to put a large amount of investment into the river restoration project. Any kind of development that is not environmentally friendly cause huge financial burden to government in the future.
However, it is not to say that agriculture does not matter. Ensuring that no one would be starved to death is also an important issue to all nations in the world. But one thing needs to be pointed out is that the reason why many people still can not have enough food to eat is not because of the lack of food, but the inefficient food distribution system. An American teenager may have obesity problem while an African kid still suffers from malnutrition. If the food is allocated properly, there should have been no need for improving modern agriculture at the cost of environment.Moreover, with the adoption of new technologies, it is possible that we can develop agriculture in a totally environment friendly way. All that stimulates the government to pay more emphasis on environment protection rather than agriculture.
In conclusion, I believe that compared with agriculture, environment problems should be taken more seriously as it is more intense and is more beneficial to the long-term economy as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, well, while, as to, in conclusion, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 8.0752688172 409% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2700.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 531.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08474576271 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01422298426 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540489642185 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 866.7 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7342943088 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.391304348 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0869565217 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17391304348 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245989918307 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598911470649 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0923847465702 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144228867415 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137226976423 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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