Governments should spend more money supporting the arts than supporting athletics such as an Olympic team.
Art and athletic are two significant issues in the society that always cause controversial debates among academicians. One prominent question that raised in this regard is that which of these should take the first priority for the governments. Some people think that art should be supported more because artists can have an influence on people and make them inspired and happy. But I hold the opposite perspective because of some pivotal reasons that sport. The ensuing paragraphs will illustrate my points of view.
The first and most important reason, the sport is one of the notable factors that caused to have a healthier society. Indeed this policy that athletic takes the first priority will persuade people and especially children to pay attention to the sport. As a result, most of the people will spend more time on sport or on the other hand they will meet the opportunity for their children to do sport. Nowadays the societies have been faced with lots of diseases originating from fat and lack of sports due to the method of modern life. Obviously, the more ones do sports, a healthier body he or she has.
Secondly, not only does sport make a healthier body but also it is quite beneficial for mind and spirit. As sport can help one to release stress and in modern era stress is a considerable problem that has deleterious effects on one’s life. Take a personal example as an example, I used to have lots of stress before special events in my life like exams or job interview but I learned to go for a run in the days that I have lots of stress. It markedly improved my stress management.
In brief, both athletic and art have considerable effects on society. In my point of view, athletic should take the first priority because it spread the culture of sport and sport has remarkable influences on health and stress management. I prefer to have regular sport in my daily.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...hat caused to have a healthier society. Indeed this policy that athletic takes the fir...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, in brief, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74545454545 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59507197025 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518181818182 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2114780343 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1176470588 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4117647059 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94117647059 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113486687559 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370384744705 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515947609251 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078364234063 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570239262241 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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