“We must reduce overhead here at the café. Instead of opening at 6 a.m. weekdays, we will now open at 8 a.m. On weekends, we will only be open from 9 a.m. until 4 p.m. The decrease in hours of operations will help save money because we won’t be paying for utilities, employee wages, or other operating costs during the hours we are closed. This is the best strategy for us to save money and remain in business without having to eliminate jobs.”
The argument presented is about a way to reduce the overhead costs of a Juniper Cafe. It suggests that change in the cafe timings will lead to the reduction of the overhead costs being incurred to that cafe. Certainly, argument is bound with unjustified assumptions with no concrete evidence provided for any one of them. Not only lack of justifications might question the authenticity of the prediction suggested but also severely undermines the argument as a whole. In order for the argument to be validated, certain evidence needs to be suggested which enhances the argument's authenticity.
The first and foremost assumption made by the argument is the relation between the cafe timings and overhead costs. It assumes that there is certain correlation between cafe timings and overhead costs of the cafe. The assumption of lessening the overhead costs with decrease in operational hours is completely unjustified. What if the operational hours has nothing to do with the overhead costs? What if the employees of the cafe are being paid huge amount of salaries which are completely inproportionate with respect to the cafe's profit? Even though if operational hours impacts the overhead costs, there can be a chance that cafe's operational hours already are minimal. If this is the case, then by further reducing the operational hours, it further aggravates the situation by amplifying the overhead costs. So, evidence about the relation between overhead cost and operational hours needs to be suggested and also mentioning that operational hours are the sole reason that overhead costs is being incurred.
Secondly, the argument assumes that the timings the prediction proposes are completely conducive to the customers visting the cafe and also to the personnel working in the cafe. What if most of the customers of the cafe visit early in the morning maybe before 6 a.m.? What if the customers base of the cafe consists mostly of the members who visit the cafe only after their work which is usually around 5 in the evening? The propsoed timings is not at all appropriate for the most of the customers which results in further deteriorating the situation of the cafe with overheading costs ballooning. What if the personnel working in the cafe are not comfortable with the proposed change in the timings? If personnel starts quitting the cafe due to this change, then administration of the cafe needs to invest more time in recruiting new staff. This can be a setback for already deteriorated condition of the cafe. Thus, in order to corroborate this assumption further, evidence about the customer timings, percentages of the customers visiting the cafe during the propsed timings and also about the personnel satisfaction about the change needs to be mentioned.
All in all, argument is riddled with underlying assumptions which are completely baseless and needs to be substantiated. The argument needs to be further elaborated by providing all the aforementioned evidences which act as bulwark to the proposed prediction's authenticity.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: What if the employees of the cafe are being paid huge amount of salaries which are completely inproportionate with respect to the cafe's profit?
Error: inproportionate Suggestion: proportional
Sentence: Secondly, the argument assumes that the timings the prediction proposes are completely conducive to the customers visting the cafe and also to the personnel working in the cafe.
Error: visting Suggestion: visiting
Sentence: The propsoed timings is not at all appropriate for the most of the customers which results in further deteriorating the situation of the cafe with overheading costs ballooning.
Error: propsoed Suggestion: proposed
Error: overheading Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Thus, in order to corroborate this assumption further, evidence about the customer timings, percentages of the customers visiting the cafe during the propsed timings and also about the personnel satisfaction about the change needs to be mentioned.
Error: propsed Suggestion: proposed
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 492 350
No. of Characters: 2515 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.71 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.112 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.923 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 157 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 118 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.391 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.947 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.188 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 570, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
...eeds to be suggested which enhances the arguments authenticity. The first and foremost...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 36, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Secondly, the argument assumes that the timings the prediction proposes are ...
^^
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re completely conducive to the customers visting the cafe and also to the personn...
^^
Line 5, column 1140, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... personnel satisfaction about the change needs to be mentioned. All in a...
^^
Line 10, column 249, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'predictions'' or 'prediction's'?
Suggestion: predictions'; prediction's
...es which act as bulwark to the proposed predictions authenticity.
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2568.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 491.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23014256619 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9487768629 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.397148676171 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.9 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9530137887 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.652173913 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.347826087 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30434782609 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107418712422 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0429537795844 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392208274105 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0721049807171 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391705519509 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.