Do you agree or disagree with this following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already how to do well.
That prosperity stems from trying new ways and coming up with new ideas rather than following stereotypes is an undeniable fact. However, whether or not these new experiences have positive effects on people’s lives is a controversial issue. As far as I am concerned, I postulate that the benefits of choosing novel ways during our lifespan would easily overshadow its drawbacks. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into my most prominent reasons for this viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that trying new experiences can significantly improve people’s creativity. To put in another way, facing with new occurrences would enhance people’s potential for making new solutions in different situations and subsequently ameliorate their brain’s abilities in further challenges. Needless to say, a large number of human being’s failures result from imitating some stereotypical methods that others carried them out previously. Indeed, each person has his own special features that can distinguish him from the others. Therefore, pursuing whatever everybody follows may does not make sense for another person as well. Take, for example, when I studied for my TOEFL exam, I could not able to amend my listening skill; Some of my friends proposed me various methods that help them in learning; I tried to follow their experiences but they were not practical for me. Finally, after wasting a large amount of my time, I examined a new way that was more convenient for me and thanks to it I could improve my weak points gradually.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that taking risks in daily life can prepare an opportunity for the public to abandon their monotonous lifestyle and be more adventurous. To further explain, nowadays many aspects of people daily lives have undergone considerable tediousness due to repeated activities that they are implementing every day. Additionally, the more tedious a person’s life is, the more aimless he become. The other day an article in an accredited psychological journal revealed that roughly 80 percent of depressed and purposeless people confess that they never tend to experience new things in their life. Being afraid of the consequences of creating new lifestyle makes them to follow some clichés that would deprive them of an exciting life. What is more, if people have an adequate personal status, they will considerably make progress in their life. As a result, taking risks can sometimes be a practical solution to achieve the success.
To put it in a nutshell, I assert that finding our own way and following new ideas rather than stereotypes seems to be of paramount importance. Novel experiences can improve people’s creativity, making them more prosperous. Should people live a happier life, it is my genuine belief that they could take some risks and create new methods for living. How can the public deal with the dullness stemmed from repeating a boring style? According to this article, I should reiterate that the advantageous of examining new opinions would undoubtedly overweight it’s disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...eotypes is an undeniable fact. However, whether or not these new experiences have positive eff...
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Line 2, column 360, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...in further challenges. Needless to say, a large number of human being's failures result from...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, as a result, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2644.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3199195171 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01476004712 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567404426559 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 822.6 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3003155566 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.956521739 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6086956522 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176480975013 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559238284882 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402505821657 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124551982871 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285711177502 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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