Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment.
It is obvious that people can’t live without food. Thus, there exists an perception that supplying food for the growing population around the world is more significant than protecting the environment. For me, i completely disagree with this point of view.
First, the damage to environment is a more imminent threat to humanity. It is true that people need eat to survive, and the growing population demands more food. However, with the improvement of agriculture, there is abundant food available for citizens. Currently, food shortage is not as serious as before. Instead, all kinds of environmental issues are having serious effect on our life. People clear forest to make farmland, and such action has already caused desertification, which is the source of sandstorm. Millions of live stocks raised by farmers release thousands of tons of green house gas to the atmosphere, contributing to the rising of sea-level.
Second, once ecological balance is broken, it is difficult to restore. Environment consists of all kinds of animals and plants which all have their important role. If one of them becomes extinct, the chain of reactions may be set off, and some of other species may disappear correspondingly. When people destroy too much habitats of bees for agricultural purpose, many bees will die. Then, most plants will not be pollinated, and there won’t be fruit. Consequently animals and human will starve to death since the plants won’t provide us with any food.
Third, the extinction of certain species is a great loss to the development of science. What the great fortune of nature can offer is biodiversity which contains numerous possibilities that can help the humanity to achieve more advancement. Some wild rice may have the potential to grow in a harsher environment. If this kind of rice can be domesticated, there will be more food supply for people. Some edible plants growing in the nature may have the ability to resist pests, and this means that such plants can have a high yield without using pesticides. However, if we don’t protect the environment, the magical species may become extinct before scientists can bring them into our life.
In conclusion, it is more crucial to protect the environment than to feed the growing population because the environment problems have more long term effects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a
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Suggestion: many
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
...linated, and there won't be fruit. Consequently animals and human will starve to death ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, third, thus, as to, in conclusion, kind of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89578928237 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560526315789 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5281452823 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9130434783 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5217391304 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04347826087 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295841106333 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764776179282 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991424934502 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179628447292 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981074638874 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.