20) Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
In this issue essay, author asserts some claim that Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. He further adds another claim contrary to the 1st stating that Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. Both the claim seems to be partially relevant, but at last it depends upon the student who have to deal with it.
I do agree with the first claim made by the author. When students choose the field depending upon the talents and their interest they are likely to get deeply interacted with that particular subject. This will help students to enjoy learning the respective subject or topic and are less likely to get bored of it. Students having a bias attitude towards a particular subject tends to come up with a new innovative ideas which would help to lead progress in that respective filed. Students would enjoy their life and there are less chances of a student to get depressed because of not able to compete with the subject against his/her choice; thus often leads to suicide. In contrary, if the students is less interested or have hatred for a particular subject then there are chances that he/she will deal with it indifferently. For ex. In schools days not all of the students are interested in maths. Instead they just try to get pass in that subject, focusing their more attention on their subject of interest.
The 2nd claim made by author is based on the job opportunities. In general, most of the students end up their education with the main motive to secure a good salary job or to start a good successful business so that he can feed his family. If we go with the 2nd claim, it may help few students but not necessarily all of them will be benefited. If the students selects his field based on the available job opportunities , there are chances that some might not be able to complete the education because they may be incapable of grasping that particular subject. This may lead to elevate a number of drop out students every year. Which may also tend students to get attracted towards drug and crime ; thus ruining their carrier.
Hence it is more relevant that students must be given a freedom to choose their own field of interest to shape their future. Not all the student are successful by taking up a subject having a job opportunities. Thus if the student is resolute to do something than what so ever be the field of interest or not; that student is going to build up successful carrier.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ect or topic and are less likely to get bored of it. Students having a bias attitude tow...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Suggestion: Instead,
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, then, thus, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66083150985 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4934752358 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457330415755 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8217813934 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.85 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.427964679267 0.243740707755 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13467661613 0.0831039109588 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154785124961 0.0758088955206 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312753172885 0.150359130593 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.189283118262 0.0667264976115 284% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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