A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The study which indicates that children living in nepal in himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower level of tooth decay than children live in sub region on united states, this statement can have multiple explanation. Both the countries are different with each other with respect to time, culture, weather, and many more. There many reason which states that the Nepali people have lower rate of tooth decay, some of them are mentioned above in the passage.
The genetic plays huge role in human as every human is different from each other and have their own species on the basis of the living in which they are living. The ancestor of both the might be different and different culture and environment leads to different adaption and mutation in human genes. Like in united states, the people have different skin tone, height, eyes and etc as compared to the Nepali people.The DNA structure is modified accordingly, for exmaple the hair on human skin are vanishing, maybe in next 400 years human beings may not have hair on their skin. THis concept is known as genetic mutation. So the point is the gene is modified according to the requirement in their body.
The life of nepali people are considered more struggling as compared to the life of people in united state. They live more naturally without any advance technology, their work includes a lot of physical activities. The culture of of Nepal is complete different, some of them dont even use tooth paste to brush their teeth intead they use neem stem for cleansing their teeth. Scientifically neem stem is 10 times more powerful in killing tooth decaying bacteria as compared to tooth paste. Moreover, nepali food is also different, they dont have access to the artificial or processed sweet food which is the major cause for tooth decay. The sweet can cause bactria to grow at triple rate in mouth, tooth decaying bactria are highly attracted to the sweet stuff. So this could be the another that why nepali people teeth are helthier than people in united states.
The environment and location could be responsible for tooth decay. The scientist had confessed that the the growth rate of bacteria is related with the atmospheric pressure, humidity level in air, temperature and etc. The nepal is located in the higher altitutude, where the atmospheric pressure is lower and temperature is lower can hinder the growth of bacteria.
So the ultimatum is that nepali people have healthier lifestyle, they dont eat processed artificial food and their food source are natural, they can have good genetic because they had lived in harsh climate unlike united states people. These alternative explanation can help to state that why himalyan nepali region people have lower tooth decay than the united state people
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Sentence: Like in united states, the people have different skin tone, height, eyes and etc as compared to the Nepali people.The DNA structure is modified accordingly, for exmaple the hair on human skin are vanishing, maybe in next 400 years human beings may
Error: exmaple Suggestion: example
Sentence: The sweet can cause bactria to grow at triple rate in mouth, tooth decaying bactria are highly attracted to the sweet stuff.
Error: bactria Suggestion: bacteria
Sentence: So this could be the another that why nepali people teeth are helthier than people in united states.
Error: helthier Suggestion: healthier
Sentence: The scientist had confessed that the the growth rate of bacteria is related with the atmospheric pressure, humidity level in air, temperature and etc. The nepal is located in the higher altitutude, where the atmospheric pressure is lower and temperature is lower can hinder the growth of bacteria.
Error: altitutude Suggestion: altitude
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flaws:
arguments are somehow duplicated. need other extra two arguments:
1. ... while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year.
2. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 466 350
No. of Characters: 2261 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.646 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.852 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.352 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.236 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.316 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
... culture, weather, and many more. There many reason which states that the Nepali people hav...
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Line 3, column 415, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...nd etc as compared to the Nepali people.The DNA structure is modified accordingly,...
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Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o the Nepali people.The DNA structure is modified accordingly, for exmaple the ha...
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Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...lot of physical activities. The culture of of Nepal is complete different, some of th...
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Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...pal is complete different, some of them dont even use tooth paste to brush their tee...
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Line 5, column 536, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...er, nepali food is also different, they dont have access to the artificial or proces...
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Line 7, column 101, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...decay. The scientist had confessed that the the growth rate of bacteria is related with...
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Line 7, column 101, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...decay. The scientist had confessed that the the growth rate of bacteria is related with...
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Line 7, column 210, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ure, humidity level in air, temperature and etc. The nepal is located in the higher alti...
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Line 9, column 71, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...i people have healthier lifestyle, they dont eat processed artificial food and their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, if, may, moreover, so, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2318.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 465.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98494623656 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44054282433 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458064516129 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.876315474 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.9 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85 5.70786347227 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350527993709 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990477648057 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.159390934036 0.0701772020484 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216317427161 0.128457276422 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.180101286477 0.0628817314937 286% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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