The majority of parents give prizes to their children when they get good grades. Some people believe that it is a good way to encourage them to keep up the good work. While, others argue that this is not a good idea to give money all the time, so that they get good grades. Personally, I think that giving money all the time when children get high marks is not a good idea.
One of the reasons that children should not receive money from their parents is because it will negatively impact their understanding of the purpose of learning and why they should perform well in school. For example, if a child knows that he will get money, he may think that this is the reason why he should get good grades. This wrong concept is going to be harmful later in their future. Even though they really deserve this gift because they worked hard to get it, it sends the wrong message to the child.
That's why, I think that receiving money all the time after getting a high score in school may be misinterpreted by the child in the wrong way.
The second reason is that not all parents have enough money to do that for their kids. Money is not always the best solution that should be used to please children. For example, one of mine friends parents were to poor and didn't have enough money to cover their expenses. My friend was very smart he always got good grades because he studied a lot. His parents were so proud of him. What he got as a prize was a hug, praise, a lot of love and encouragement to continue studying hard. Even though the money is appealing to everyone, it is not always the right solution to please children.
Because of this, kids need more love and attention rather than money to keep up with good scores.
Summing up, I believe that money is not the right solution for parents to give money to their children after they get high grades. Parents should give them more love and attention so that children can be happy and secure in themselves
The majority of parents give prizes to their children when they get good grades. Some people believe that it is a good way to encourage them to keep up the good work. While, others argue that this is not a good idea to give money all the time, so that they get good grades. Personally, I think that giving money all the time when children get high marks is not a good idea.
One of the reasons that children should not receive money from their parents is because it will negatively impact their understanding of the purpose of learning and why they should perform well in school. For example, if a child knows that he will get money, he may think that this is the reason why he should get good grades. This wrong concept is going to be harmful later in their future. Even though they really deserve this gift because they worked hard to get it, it sends the wrong message to the child.
That's why, I think that receiving money all the time after getting a high score in school may be misinterpreted by the child in the wrong way.
The second reason is that not all parents have enough money to do that for their kids. Money is not always the best solution that should be used to please children. For example, one of mine friends parents were to poor and didn't have enough money to cover their expenses. My friend was very smart he always got good grades because he studied a lot. His parents were so proud of him. What he got as a prize was a hug, praise, a lot of love and encouragement to continue studying hard. Even though the money is appealing to everyone, it is not always the right solution to please children.
Because of this, kids need more love and attention rather than money to keep up with good scores.
Summing up, I believe that money is not the right solution for parents to give money to their children after they get high grades. Parents should give them more love and attention so that children can be happy and secure in themselves
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...f mine friends parents were to poor and didnt have enough money to cover their expens...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that children can be happy and secure in themselves
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n can be happy and secure in themselves
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, really, second, so, well, while, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41873278237 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.15548147118 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438016528926 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 479.7 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0374569622 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4210526316 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1052631579 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26315789474 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.566536181544 0.236089414692 240% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197076547137 0.076458572812 258% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.195835668091 0.0737576698707 266% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305041994995 0.150856017488 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.282015596768 0.0645574589148 437% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.45 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 86.8835125448 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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