Write a short essay in which you illustrate the sense of isolation or loneliness which life in modern urban society can bring
These days, Isolation or loneliness is a global issue. It is the state of feeling alone and lack of connection or communication between people, groups, or whole societies. You can be lonely in relationships, in families, or even when in crowds.
Nowadays, the developing technology, the phone becomes inseparable, which makes us isolated. This happens with my own family. My family reunion always gets together with a smartphone and the members of the family who gaze at the telephone or tablet screen to send a message or surf Facebook instead of raising one’s head to chat together. At a family gathering, dozens of relatives gathered around the family meal, but focused on Facebook. They themselves create a stuffy atmosphere.
At that time, I feel like an invisible person, empty, depressed and feel self-pity due to isolated from my family. The technology at the dining table, everyone does not have to force to enjoy the delicious food, listen and chat together. I seem to disconnect with them. Now, what I only need is an informal meeting, people just eat and talk together happily, not feeling lonely even when surrounded by the members of the family. The time spent gathering together suddenly becomes insipid, and there is nothing to recall when thinking about it.
As a result, since I do not want to be trapped in loneliness, I think I need to overcome it, I proactively suggested to the family that everyone should drop the phone, say no to the smartphone when they eat an intimate meal with family, and have fun together to create a harmonious atmosphere and have great moments together. Indeed, we need a more real life, closer and more integrated, not only to express ourselves in the virtual world, which makes us distant and lonely.
In short,
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'enjoying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: enjoying
... table, everyone does not have to force to enjoy the delicious food, listen and chat tog...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...akes us distant and lonely. In short,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, i feel, i think, in short, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94314381271 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74793078319 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605351170569 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.5026296525 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5333333333 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 7.06120827912 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0795039109508 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0351699245287 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522077492511 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0483449948966 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340759302027 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.67 Out of 6
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