In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
it is true that watching tv affects children. While some people believe that the length of time spent watching them that has a significant impact on children. In my opinion, it is the content of the program that has a more marked influence on their behavior.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why watching tv for long periods of time has negative effects on the development of children both about physically and psychologically. Firstly, children are exposed to intermittent flashes of light from the television, this could cause serious damage to the eyes and can cause temporary blindness if children watch tv excessively. In addition, when children keep their eyes glued to screens for several hours, waves from the television may cause a headache, even this can significantly increase the risk of developing obesity and type 2 diabetes. Secondly, the enormous amounts of time are spent wastefully for electronic devices by young viewers instead of it should be used in more useful activities like reading, exercise and interacting with friends or their relatives. All of the activities are crucial for a healthy lifestyle. when children watch television excessively, as a result they are less likely to be spending time developing social skills. For instance, the productivity of group work will be decreased if the lack of communication skill.
On the other hand, it is the broadcasted images that have the most direct effects on young viewers. First reason is that in our modern consumer society, commercial advertising also affects how children behave. For example, children are easily swayed by advertisements for food, toy or video games and so may promote their parent to buy these goods impulsively. Another reason is that the unhealthy content of television programs can be major reason that children more turn to crime in the future. Through advertising on prime time television children are not hard to learn about the alcohol and smoking use. Consequently, the number of children who break a law increasing constantly in many countries.
In conclusion, though both two factors have their own implications, I believe that the content is more considerable. Hence, parent intervention is essential in controlling children's tv viewing habits and awareness of children about programs with a healthy mind.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27882037534 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95138587428 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563002680965 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1132922267 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.388888889 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7222222222 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7222222222 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0783673373459 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0260482565402 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0259527033636 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0506708199223 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239895742688 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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