The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart illustrate the proportion of Australians who did physical activities in 2010, while the data varied with different age groups.

Looking into more details, boys of 15 to 24 age group were more involved in daily physical activities, attaining 52.8% and thereafter the proportion kept on declining till 35 to 44 age section, acquiring 39.5%. However, again, a gradual rise in trend of workout, approximately an addition of 2% at every 10 years till 65 and over.

The proportion covered by women from adolescence to being mature, therein the trend of physical activities kept on increasing from 47.7% to 53.3%. Nevertheless, the proportion slumped as women enter their aging period, to be more specific the proportion reached to 53% and 47.1% within age group 55 to 65 and over, respectively.

Overall, both gender experienced a variation in maintaining a daily physical activity plan at different stages of life. Wherein, women still sustained its higher proportion till certain age group as compared to men.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, nevertheless, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 866.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24848484848 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93007582711 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654545454545 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 254.7 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6361035269 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.714285714 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.23603664747 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303934250363 0.215688989381 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140475224233 0.103423049105 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122005375966 0.0843802449381 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205953347734 0.15604864568 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130918835851 0.0819641961636 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.2329268293 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.06136585366 116% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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