Some People Think That Parents Should Teach Children How to Be Good Members of Society.Others , However, Believe That School Is the Place to Learn This.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
many people believe that it is significant using spare time for things that enhance the mind, for instance, reading and doing word puzzles. The others think that it is vital to relax the mind during spare time. In my opinion, I agree that people should use leisure time for activities which improve the mind.
In one hand, some people have very exhausting jobs. therefore, they would like to relax during leisure time, so they do not want to do anything within this time. they think they need to rest. moreover, many people are lazy, for this reason, they do not keen to do activities to improve the mind. For instance reading a book and doing sudoku puzzles.
On the other hand, many people have stressful jobs too, but they like to enhance the mind. therefore, they do many things within leisure time such as reading a novel, solving puzzles, doing exercises which are useful for improving the mind. I think that people who utilise spare time doing activities that boost the mind are more successful than others who love to use spare time for relaxing.
Finally, in my opinion, people should use their leisure time to improve the mind. For this reason, people should do anything which is useful for enhancing the mind. moreover, ı would argue that people should be hard working not to be idle. so they always do something to be more successful. Furthermore, I think some activities are so relaxing while they improve the mind. such as doing sudoku puzzles.
In conclusion, ı agree that people should do activities that improve the mind during leisure time. because, while that they are performing activities for improving the mind, the activities can contribute to job achievement. moreover, I think, leisure time should be used effectively since it is so precious.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90066225166 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38995786593 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 176.041082164 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.397350993377 0.561755894193 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.805315686 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0 106.682146367 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104651178332 0.244688304435 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511289112614 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376011836309 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0818540919507 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403593519721 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.0946893788 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.58 8.58950901804 77% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 78.4519038076 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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