People recognize a difference between children and adults. What events (experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult? Uses pecific reasons and examples to explain your answer.
Every living being goes through various phrases in their life from their birth to last breath. Among all of them, Human being created with grandeur features enjoys these stages, gaining myriad aspects of life. During this course of development of creatures, not their life advanced but also mental, physical and biological changes can be seen. Alike a seed sprouts into a plant then with proper nurturing grows into a big tree and goes old turning feeble.
The journey of human life start as infant; crawling, learning basic movements and expressions, and learning most peculiar feature of human- speech. Further rejoice their adolescent era which humankind enjoys the most, as they sensibly learn facts of living life although process of learning never ends. They grows in length and physical charm. And it is a most pleasurable stage of life as you commit innocent mistakes and in sentence get scolded by elders. One strives hard to study for making future bright. Human enjoy this stage without any stress and burden of obligations. Strolling further, he enters in adulthood, Adulthood can be define as biological adult and social adult. Biological adult; when they are biologically developed or goes through physical changes. On the other hand they can be identified as socially adult; who are recognized by the culture and law; as per law a person is considered adult at the age of 18. One enter adulthood with enduring lots of hard and soft involvements, which make them more levelheaded, independent judges of their life, robust, self – assertive and pragmatic.
My mother always says tackling me was challenge for her in my childhood. I was very mischievous kid among all of my siblings. I still burst into laugh when I recollect an incident – I participated in mono -acting competition when I was in my 9th grade, and mimicked legendary queen of Jhansi, dressed up in a sari with little touch of make-up. I won second prize and got lots of praise for my performance and sari, which we borrowed from my mother’s friend and suppose to return it after my competition. So, mom asked me to change my clothes and I was determine not to do so, because in my mind people found me very beautiful in that dress so, why should I change and I wanted to retain it without bothering that my age children’s doesn’t wear sari, it is worn by married women’s. How silly was I? And now I share my things with my friends and family members, even allow them to keep things they like. Now my mother say I have grown contrast with my childhood when I console her for her disappointments, and handle worries rationally with patience.
I heard nothing is permanent so as our life but it has lot to offer, and we discover it as we grow. Differences are seen everywhere starting from color of soils to humankind, but humankind share similar stages of life although substance of everyone’s life would be dissimilar. Childhood gives us nostalgic memories to cheers in adulthood and adulthood artfully construct us to conclude life.
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Sentence: They grows in length and physical charm.
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Suggestion: Refer to They and grows
Sentence: Human enjoy this stage without any stress and burden of obligations.
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Sentence: So, mom asked me to change my clothes and I was determine not to do so, because in my mind people found me very beautiful in that dress so, why should I change and I wanted to retain it without bothering that my age children's doesn't wear sari, it is worn by married women's.
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Sentence: Now my mother say I have grown contrast with my childhood when I console her for her disappointments, and handle worries rationally with patience.
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I was very mischievous kid
I was a very mischievous kid
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What events (experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult?
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