Professional sports people are often idolised by young children. Some people think that they, therefore, have a responsibility to be good role models at all times for children. Do you agree or disagree?
Apparently, young children often admire talented and famous people especially sportmen. That is why professional sports are thought to be good role models. Nonetheless, in my perspective, it is not necessary for them to set perfect examples at all times for admirers.
At the outset, professional sports always make effort to show their positive qualities in most of situations, which has profound influence on children's development. Besides, their enthusiasm in training and competing can become helpful source of inspiration for adolescents. As a result, youngsters will think and act more positively, they will love playing sports and they will habour dream of being professional athletes like their idols. For instance, Mbappe - a very young and famous football player playing for PSG team used to idolize C. Ronaldo - a superstar of world footballer playing for Juventus team. When being asked, Mbappe said that Ronaldo was the main reason he decided to practice diligently to become a professional sport.
However, noone is perfect, so are the sportmen. Being perfect role models sometimes makes them stressful so they do wrong things as a way of relieving pressure to return the true version of themselves. Rooney - a well known football player who used to play for Manchester United is a typical example. A few years ago, having been in charge of being a good role model all the time and having been scrutinized by the press made him so depressed that he drank a lot and fought with his teammates to release his bad mood. In other words, doing wrong deeds helps sportmen advoid suffering from mental problems and survive in this harsh world.
To sum up, I think that it is unessential for the professianl sports to set a good example at all times because nobody is perfect and normal people are those who have both good and bad aspects.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 91, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the situations') or simply say ''most situations''.
Suggestion: most of the situations; most situations
...ort to show their positive qualities in most of situations, which has profound influence on childr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, however, nonetheless, so, thus, well, for instance, i think, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1568.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10749185668 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7255983887 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625407166124 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5849761189 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.533333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361575232616 0.244688304435 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101745012205 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721786950516 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226496563237 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743456867407 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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